Untained you are befitting to me,
sheer beauty bestows my eyes.
Do not be frightened my dear
just follow my orders
dread not what lies ahead.
Like a thief in the night
I claim your soul.
Stretch out your wings
wrap them around me.
I will not leave you here to die,
I'll wrap you in demon lace.
Always to serve and protect you
from the evil torment of the world.
Come with me, conform yourself and
you will live forever.
Lay back and dream
thrist in the thirth degree.
search for the passion,
that soars on your wings.
Author notes
Prompt:
We want you to select a poem from one of our fellow Poetic Bandit’s and use their theme to create your own poem. You will not rewrite their poem, but be inspired to take it wherever your poetic talents direct you.
The catch-you must use a different form of poetry. If the poem selected is free verse, you need to write a form poem. If the poem selected is a form poem, you need to write a free verse. A rhyming poem will become an inspired non-rhyming form, and anywhere else your poetic muse leads.
Please note in your author’s note the Poetic Bandit that inspired you, and a link to their original poem.
Author is Frodofan
Poem link is: http://allpoetry.com/poem/5102419
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A contest entry
- Merry-Go-Round: Mid-Month Contest For the Poetic Bandits by azure85.
900 points, ended April 2, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I love the beginning, being so bold and it grabs attention straight away. The dark nature of this is amazing and it reminds me of a Nightwish or Within Temptation song.
Stunning wording and also fantastic vocabulary.
Congratulations on the Honorable mention!
GwG
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This poem is just stunning to put it lightly. I am completely blown away by this, and the image at the top of the page is the perfect image to go with these words. Each word is perfectly placed....saying so much within so little. I could just feel this one. Bittersweet...kind of like a crossfire. You have a true gift in writing....keep sharing it!
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This dark write is a creative poem that was inspired by the poem of another Bandit. Vivid imagery employed in this well crafted poem, well done!
Best of luck in the contest.
Dennis
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A very good poem, with the allure of desire holding the person enthralled until the final conclusion. An excellent entry, thank you so much.
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Very good, a nice mystical piece. Think you did well with it and showd a different view. Nice form and flow.
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I really like it.
And I like the picture too.
I can definently see how this came from the original and I really like how you chose to write it from the opposite person (or being's) view. Best of luck!
Thanks for picking me.
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