Transparent insanity falling, remembering
a thread deeper; distressed savage.
Dangerous thoughts mirror layers of futility
unfathomable; dissolve wholeness.
Bottomless hallucinations swim
by veiled absolution; deceptive joy.
Enmeshed distrust of truth sheltered,
sparks nuance of ideas; acute doubt.
Whirling stranger clock silences,
dissolve merging discovery; lies float.
(c) Debby Sorensen Carlson
3/25/2009
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This is so true. Very revealing and wisely written. God bless
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Most excellent piece, sweetie and I couldn't agree more with your message
Thank you for sharing your poetry and thoughts
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Sandy
Thank you so much !!! Blessings..d
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Beautiful too many of us hide behind lies and deception
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darbysman
thanks so much for reading and commenting. Much Appreciated ! Blessings.d
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Ugh mind games smell. Great write and it flows so nicely x
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DD
Thanks.. I can't stand them either..
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Ugh mind games smell. Great write and it flows so nicely x
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POET
Perhaps those mind games that torture us. The mind within our mind...Such sadness that brings us on a down spiral. But the poet creates and the poet can destroy. Well done poet.
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Bob
Thank you !!! And, you are so right ! Blessings. d
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Dangerous thoughts mirror layers of futility
unfathomable; dissolve wholeness.
an amazing piece of writing so powerful, so descriptive, well done, the final line also lies wrought with power. -
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Thank you so much !! d
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not sure
the size is very nice. To say this is over my head is true. over my head like in outter space. Maybe thast was your point. overall the poem makes me feel lost
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Brother Bob,
One is lost without Christ.. and that is the essence of the poem. In Christ, love Debby
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Lies Float. . . Whew!
unfatomable/unfathomable, finger must have skipped.
This is incredible, Sis. Deep, deep; yet, it seems to me it refers to man's ways in contradiction to God's teachings, wherein man's lies float but soon will drown. I might be miles off, because it also speaks to some forms of mental illness. This really is thought provoking and so well-written. If it doesn't take the GOLD, I will be very disappointed.
Luv & hugs, SisBon
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Insanity is living without God. When I started writing this for the contest, I was stringing words but it seemed to take on its own life. It could be read both ways but you are on point. The lies that are thrown at me are ridiculous. There is a man ar work who tells me I will have to speak fluent hebrew or I will not see heaven. I said Jesus spoke to the multitudes and all understood in their own language. I said, I do not have a problem hearing God. I listen with my heart. I told him he will be held accountable for his false teachings. This man is very self righteous and smug. I pray for him. How can one not be humble in the face of God ? How can anyone worship God without feeling humble and thankful and in awe of His beauty ?
This did not win but that is okay. In Christ, I have all the gold I need.
Much love, d
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