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My Constant Thought

 

 

 

this is ...

... my place



the breeze will take my thoughts
blow them around for a while

I catch each one
try to make sense of it

examine, look for answers


if superfluous
toss into the deep,
clear the clutter
from my mind -

some can be stored
in grey cabinets,
in grey corridors

to be retrieved

another time

another day


today I’m alone
 ... but not lonely

I get home
you’ll be there
you’ll kiss me and smile

you understand me

and

 ... my place

 

 

you are

 

 ... my constant thought

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt is the image.

Credit to image by Peter Visontay-Human Railpropped.

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  • JinSays gold member
    April 10

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    Sigh. . . .
    Lovely.
    Truly Sue, this is magical and lovely.
    Thank you love.
    Jin

  • Purrsanthema
    March 29
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    How lovely! Very serene and minimalist. A soothing pleasure to read!


  • malmadre gold member
    March 27

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    A sorting of thoughts! the prompt is so meaningful in the serenity and so are your words, something about it touches the sentiments in us all. I like the idea of going home to happier warmer surroundings. You did well!


  • cricketjeff gold member
    March 26

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    It even sounds like a train of thoughts bouncing around in the breeze

    Great stuff

    Jeff


  • hawkeslake gold member
    March 25

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    Although I know I am older than you, so much of what you write about brings back memories for me; this one, of a special place of my own. You seem to choose (find?) the precise word to convey the exact emotion you are presenting, particularly from a prompt such as this one. Your flow is also always rhythmic as any form poetry might be. I enjoyed reading and relating to this, especially since it is gray and snow-hazy here tonight. Lita

  • truly beautiful and amazing as always!!!!!


  • csmmoms2
    March 25

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    Lovely

    I like how the wind snatched up your thoughts and let them mingle with the breeze...to be tucked away...safely...to be examined later...again. A song really. -c

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