This is the box I got
Gray, clouded skies, rain threatening
jagged scars from the war, prickly weeds
all these
in the box I got
This is the box I chose
crammed to the brim with trouble
overflowing with heartache and pain
all these remain
in the box I got
My box was marked "very special"
and had my name on top
so I knew it was a present
no other soul had got
this box I got
I grew because of the box I selected
though the road's been rough and rocky
I finally accepted my crazy lot
but I wish I could trade in
the box I got
Author notes
X x P O E S I N G X x
A contest entry
- Contest #1 (Quote Prompts) by VelvetWings.
1050 points, ended April 4, 15 entries
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Comments
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Nice use of refrains there I really liked this it was interesting and thank you for entering
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Wonderful poem
Favorite lines:
"This is the box I chose
crammed to the brim with trouble
overflowing with heartache and pain
all these remain
in the box I got"
Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest -
excellent piece!
reminds me of a piece i wrote about a box..
you've got a really good style yourself lady, i like very much!
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very nice work ilo ve ti keep it up and thank you for your entry....
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charming write, took a moment to place the influece, am thinking you'll get mentioned at the very least. Return the favor?
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wow I really love this poem. I once wrote a poem for my humanities class like this. The task was to write about yourself describing it as a package. But your poem was much better. I love the ending how you say you accept this box but you wish your life was a bit easier. Great job =]
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Life is all about choices..and you've just stated it perfectly... loved this
Love,
Stacy
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This is a great write. I love the short stanzas, each descriptive of what was inside the box or how it made you/narrator as a person. I also like the repetition of each ending line, symbolizing the fact that you/narrator cannot get rid of the box.
Although this one is kind of opposite to the quote, it was indeed along the lines of what I was looking for for the contest, and I think you did a great job with it.
You let the quote inspire you well. Thank you for this entry, and best of luck in my contest!
~Sparrow
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