Gutter noise. Water pouring over the streets, down to my feet.
Rats crawling around, chasing trash. The smell burning my nostrils.
I dream't about this. Poverty. Envy. Burning world. With souls at my feet.
I stand around the dead dust; the bodies obey the silence.
Resident evil, people are people.
With claws, condescending. Jaws of physical hunger.
Prey on me. Pray to be. Forever damned. Lost in rapture.
You're trapped. Collapsed, in a barricade of my blasphemy.
What heals you, kills me. In-slave the pain, be my butcher.
Scars go far. Still not much of a looker, but I feel prettier, now.
Pretty, Gutter. Safety, Cutter.
WHERE'S MY DANGER? No wonder I like strangers..
The way they touch me. Kinda like you, but better.
Cut me deeper. When I'm bleeding too much, they give me a sweater.
I need to find my sanctuary, need to try to play it safe.
But I'm not comfortable in my skin, when its being raped.
Gutter noise. Concrete palace, painted in mold.
This is where I lay my head.
This is where they shit on me.
This is why your messiah is dead?!
This is the life He gave to me.
Gutter over flowing. Faces confused.
Not knowing its my gift, that Satan bought.
I started the flood, craved the abuse.
I GUESS ITS ALL MY FAULT.
Pretty Gutter. Safety Cutter. Let me suffer.
I dream't about this. Emptiness. Greed.
Burning world brought me to my knees.
These verses are curses to whoever believes in me.
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Title- 4/5
Creativity- 3/5
Use of metaphors, imagery, etc.- 7/10
Overall package- 3/5
Total= 17/25
This was a different form of dirty
pretty and it was well-composed.
Originally dark thoughts in
this as well.
Good job.
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Good job and good luck.
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Amazing. I truly loved the imagery and all the 'hardcore, in your face' truth. Amazing. Again - amazing. I am almost speechless
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I must admit that I find this to be amazing. Everything flows so smoothly, and you can tell how strong it is. I love it
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I have always enjoyed the gutter.
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