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The First Glass

 

 

 

in the evening light
setting sun
brings life to the hillside

the vines like platoons of soldiers
stand side-by-side
row-on-row,
shadows mingle in the dusk

sunlight becomes sugar
dark red grapes
turn deep claret
waiting to be picked


late Autumn
bountiful fruit hang heavy
hillside harvest

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I watch your lips
kiss glass’s rim
the tip of your tongue
that first drop of wine
taste buds explode
all your senses heighten

we share the first glass,
sweet, rich, fruity
warmed by fire’s flame



the claret breathes
once more

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt ...

claret ... dark red-purple colour; a dark-red wine

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  • hawkeslake gold member
    March 28

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    Another one that somehow I missed when first posted! Absolutely lovely, and reminds me of a trip my partner and I took to the wine country in California -- I wrote a poem called "Upon my tongue", but it does not have the impact this one does (at least for me LOL!) The color just sparkles (and I don't mean the background.) I feel like I just had a glass of wine, and it is 10:20 AM here! Your line breaks are perfect, and word placement impeccable. Congrats on the Gold! With slightly alcoholic affection-- Lita


  • Emmyb gold member
    March 26

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    congratulations on the most delicious write ive read in a long time. well done indeed. i am ready to put you in my finalists list!!!

    Emma


  • csmmoms2
    March 25

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    When the wine is uncorked and you splash a bit into the glass and swirl it it 'round to see it's texture to smell it's fruit. It's dipping your toes in the pool to catch the aroma. -c

  • csmmoms2
    March 25
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    When the wine is uncorked and you splash a bit into the glass and swirl it it 'round to see it's texture to smell it's fruit. It's dipping your toes in the pool to catch the aroma. -c

  • Luanne71
    March 25

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    the vines like platoons of soldiers
    stand side-by-side
    row-on-row,
    shadows mingle in the dusk
    ^^^
    You paint such amazing imagery here.

    I watch your lips
    kiss glass’s rim
    the tip of your tongue
    that first drop of wine
    taste buds explode
    all your senses heighten
    ^^^
    Such beautiful words. It actually makes my mouth water for your words create such strong imagery.

    This is my first poem I am commenting on,on this site and if they all read as wonderful as this ... I am in for a magical journey.
    Sorry I can't offer any critique .. for I think it is beautifully penned as is.


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      March 25
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      Thank you for your lovely comment and I'm honoured that I am the first poet of many I hope you will read on this site.
      I look forward to reading your poetry and hope you will enjoy the AP family.

      All the best to you

      Sue

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