Division beyond perfection
the price of passage
shatter the gate
that reflects the crescent moon
of my shadow self
A dreamers step is heard
the spirit has returned home
shimmering in the dappled light
within this natural world
I become invisible
if I wish
a shape shifter
to invoke the whisperings
of divine blessings
Residing in sounds
that cease to breathe
my world changes
with composers through the ages
the simplest of secrets
mending my web of life
Please tell me what you think
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Invisable and just maybe invinsible
I love this and the imagery
So imaginative and keep on penning what you feel ....
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Oh Ek is mal oor die gedig!!!
Love the way that you can turn yourself invisable and you can fade away like a melody. This poem reflects allot of sadness and also allot of hope. Beautiful poetry and grand imagery.
BRAVO!!
Take care
Becks
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I love this the images that are brought to mind, 'a shape shifter'
a well penned write
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You Came Through !
"We are spirits, in a material world" - Police(Sting) .... 1981 was a good year. you have put in words an incredible concept - it is life changing. -
Very inspirational. I enjoyed reading.
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I really liked this poem. The words you choose, for every poem you create and construct,just leaves me completely breathless everytime. You write so beautifully and fluently. Almost like a soothing symphony, playing the either happy, sad, or disturbing tune, fusing together to reveal such art. Great job on this one. i really liked it. keep those creative juices flowing!
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very nice writing you share here. i like the images created and the residing in sounds thought. well done.
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this is a cool poem..it souds like you suffer from what they say is an illness, but i see it as a gift: synesthesia...keep writing...the way you do
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Great
I really liked the whole poem, the imagry you use is so powerfull. The supernatural aspects are portrayed very well... If you are planning to revise this poem the only thing I felt I didn't truley get was the very end:
the simplest of secrets
mending my web of life
What the simplest of secrets is and why you are "mending". I'm guessing the end ties into the whole poem somhow and I failed to see it.
Great work.
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Sis,
This is amazing! What a wonderful job you did on this one! I love it! I sooooooo wish I were there with you right now!!!
Great job!
Ek is lief vir jou altyd
Nyetta
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You will be sis, just give it time...
Ook altyd lief vir jou...
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This is truly marvelous! I feel transported with you. Do they have snacks? Just kidding. What a wondrous expression of spiritual feeling.
Residing in sounds
that cease to breathe
my world changes
with composers through the ages
the simplest of secrets
mending my web of life
This is just masterful and makes me melt! Wow!
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You'll have to pay extra for the snacks... But cause you're my friend, I'll make an exception....
Thank you for reading... Big 's
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