In the warm summer sun my skin burns...
It blisters...
Hiding in a retrospective shade,
I find a mountain...
No love, no emotion.
Just peace wrapped in silver molten.
This Mountain is a freedom...
This mountain is me...
In the warm summer sun,
I have found a place, from the shade, to be free.
A contest entry
- Mountains for Molassis by apoeticinjustice.
900 points, ended April 19, 10 entries
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hmmm... give an honest opinion!
Comments
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Very interesting piece. Leaves the reader thinking, which I like. It's nice that you were able to put so much out there with so few words.
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an interesting metaphor of life...the mountain is freedom is a line that I particularly like...the mountains always give me a sense of freedom. Well done.
Rory
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this is an interesting poem. i like the line 'this peace wrapped in silver molten' it has very nice imagery.
goodluck and thanks for entering -
i would like to thank you for this entry into the contest for my friend cheri. i wish you well in this contest. viyanna rosemarie
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Honest Opinion
I really liked this!! The scene is painted poetically. The idea of the mountain is a great metaphor. It's interesting. The mountain expresses individuality and also seems to express that you are like stone, unmoved yet free --maybe u have been hurt and so you are like a mountain. I like the image of 'peace wrapped in silver molten'
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