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Empyrean We Search

Penetrated thoughts
leash by the hill
cross is built to kill

discharging firmament
relish cobalt and hidden lies
that surface once or twice
but forget the morale
the god will reap you
and the sin as the hairs on your head

seek the shelter of selflessness
that mounded hill ahead

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  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    March 28

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    We are all in such dillema and making ourselves a big target of this great truth..you are very deep and concerned as well..thanks for sharing..