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Waiting in This Moment


I will abandon time
to yesterday,
when the face of the clock
was still smiling,
and the hands
        still moving.

A time when
the smile on your face
was still there,
and your hands on my body
        still caressed.

Where have you gone?


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Prompt: Abandon

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  • Rose Angel gold member
    March 24

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    Imagery excellent.."when the face of the clock was still smiling" Liked that..all the best in the contest..

  • femurlee
    March 24

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    This is so sad, but elegantly penned! I'm bookmarking this to study why it works so well. I think it takes exceptional talent to write a tangible image with few words. Peace.


  • T.o.r.t.u.r.e. gold member
    March 24

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    I really like this poem. i like the word abandon. its a very good poem. i like the clock thing. good luck in the contest