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A Poem to myself

Nobody Likes your opinion
Nobody thinks that your great.
Nobody thinks that your better.
Why don’t you just give it a break.

Nobody likes a rambler.
Nobody likes a blogger.
Nobody Thinks on your petty annoyances
Your flamboyance Is a pain.

Why not help them!
Why not Be a good sport.
Why not cater to there every whim
There obviously more important.

Your just a spec.
There big Blots.
They have problems
You do not.

Everything you do is wrong
Everything you do is vain
Don’t Try to talk about it.
Nobody is listening to your cry

So that fire within you.
Let it dim down
For why should you kindle
If your going to drown.

Stop all the madness
Stop all the pain
Just help them, Listen
Its for There pain.

Don’t bother them with your troubles
Don’t bother them with your pain
There pain is superior
Stop Being so Vain.

O.o

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  • Syri
    July 5

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    Very good. ^-^ I liked it a lot. It was really sad and captured that well which is great and the below comment is right, your repitition isn't annoying at all. Well done.

    ~Viper


  • ChrissyJean
    March 26

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    Oh babe...Its a good poem, yes. Yet it brings me so much sorrow. I think that you're great, I don't think you're a pain, I love your opinions, and I love hearing what you have to say. You don't annoy me, except with the buttons on the phone (who decided they needed to beep anyways! lol jk), and honey I love you with all that my heart can hold. I want you to talk to me, but when you are ready. I know that it is hard for you, so I will give you all the space and time you need. I love you so very much.

    On the poetic side: Sometimes repetition can be quite annoying but you have captured a lot of emotion here with it so kudos for that I really don't think that I would change this one bit. Good job, Honey.


  • Engaged
    March 25

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    Ziggyness! i love the poem but not what it stands for! i will always be here to listen to your problems! you have listened to mine so i will listen to yours! do ever say that you are not great because you are i love you Ziggyness!


  • duckonahockeypuck
    March 24
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    Good poem, but do you care if I become a grammar nazi? haha


  • hisaddiction
    March 24
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    I like it!

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