A distant thunder rolls like murmured words
That whisper of a battle far away;
As if in proof, in dark and towering herds,
The clouds come marching with their lightning spears
Prepared to strike in ominous array,
As their immense battalion slowly nears.
It has begun - the battle of the storm -
And torrents dash the bare and cowering ground;
The lightning spears are hurled from each dark form,
Striking the earth below them in their rage;
And to the crashing drum of thunder's sound,
The earth and sky celestial war engage.
A distant thunder rolls like murmured words -
It has begun - the battle of the storm.
Author notes
my second Cornish sonnet - here's the first one I wrote: http://allpoetry.com/poem/4975675
'amazing'
A contest entry
- Show Me What You've Got! by SpeakLove93.
600 points, ended May 5, 84 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Brilliant!
this was amazing, you seem so talented I cannot wait to read more!!!!
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well, if you give me comments like that, you will. . .
Elinor
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Very nice flow.
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Wonderfu!
This is an excelent write! Your imagery and metaphores are extraordinary! You look at the simplest of nature's events and turn it into a story. Lovely job and thank you for entering! -
Excellence!
You exceeded yourself in this! Top notch poetry with strong metaphor that carried through the poem in a resounding crescendo of thundering rage.
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thank you thank you. . .
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Tumultuous and moody and brooding, and with a fore-boding and ominous tone throughtout this extremely well-wrought sonnet.
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Sorry canceling contest. Only had 4 people put what I asked for in the AN...Sorry I am not doing it if people can't listen. I'll host a new contest.
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okay I was wondering what happened. . .
Oh well. Some other time. . .
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Beautifully crafted poem
where the craft is so well overpowered by the theme that structure is forgotten in the reading. I've not seen the final fight of heaven for earth so depicted elsewhere, but it is an apt one. I feel the storm coming. hoeftra
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thank you very much. . .
I am pleased you think so. . . 
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Beautifully crafted poem where
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And I will Praise Him in the storm, strength flows in these words. Excellent images and write. Blessings.
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oh thank you, Denerica! I am blessed by your blessings. . .
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Absolutely wonderful! I loved everything about this write!!! Thank you for sharing!
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This write is fantastic in every way. Imagery and metaphor used with great skill. A awsome scene painted with your pen.
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this has the sights, sounds and ominous mood...so very well done, such drama in these contrasts; I have this feeling about storms they fill the air with an energy...so this poem has that too... wonderful...PK
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don't they just? glad to know it gives you a feeling. . .
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it simply brilliant.
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I found it very tricky to get a satisfactory result in this form, you have excelled yourself, beautifully done and an excellent choice for the front page.
Great stuff
Jeff
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Ah, thank you Jeff, thank you very much! I am honored. . .
Elinor
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Very nice great imagerygreat concept in the idea of a battle...
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thanks.
Elinor
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Most excellent, and extremely well done sonnet. First class no matter how you slice it! I loved it a ton!!! bravo!
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aw, thanks, Mike. . . you don't think there's anything I need to revise?
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Great!
I have never written a sonnet but wish I could. The imagery is fantastic. Makes me think of Armageddon!
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wow, thanks. . .why don't you try writing one, you might find it easier than you think. . .
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This is nicely penned. I like the diction and the form lends well to enhance the tone and ominous mood as it breaks up the rhyme a little, makes it roll. Well written! , Dannie
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