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Forever in Time

The time that it takes to have you back is somthing I can take
I hope the things you do in life and stuff you find make you happy
When you are happy it makes me smile and warms my heart

I hope you find all you want in this world
I wont rush I wont push take all the time you need
You are the best thing in my life still even if your my friend right now

My heart will forever be yours
My soul will always search for yours
I may sound like a fool for saying it but it is true I will always love you

Author notes

I thought this was not a really good poem I was fighting back tears at the time that may have been why but yeah this poem was from the heart
Written March 1st, 2004

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  • LoveOfRaven
    March 16, 2004
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    well in your own comments..u said it wasnt so good..so why not evise it and go back and put in all that emotion? it was good..and sweet..but im sure u can make it better,, just going by what u said


  • SomberShadowz
    March 8, 2004
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    Great

    This was a very good poem Robin. It expresses your thoughts, emotions and desires. It tells the reader what you feel, and how you look at your "relationship", and how you will wait for your other half. I used to say that alot, but I unfortunately won't wait anymore. I'm mean like that, Love me now, or love me never.. Bothers me not I wish you both luck, and hope things turn out for the best! Good luck and great poem once again Robin!
    ~Somber

  • False hopes
    March 2, 2004
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    Whether you class this as good poetry or not, i think its great. I can understand what you must be feeling and the emotion was flooding out of it in such a way where you cant help but feel touched by the words.
    Great write as always hun
    ~Em xx


  • memo3
    March 1, 2004
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    This was awsome. I dont know why you said you wouldnt make another poem but you should continue writing bc this peace was beautifully crafted I loved it. The background is really good but its kinda hard to read the font on the background. Awsome write and keep up the good work.

    jason


  • Desiree Darkk
    March 1, 2004
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    awwwwww

    Awwww SH. Ya know you have to be friends first sweetie so that's okay. You know what they say, if you want someone to be yours, set them free. If they come back to you they are yours forever, if not, they never were. But then you already know that. This made me feel very sad for you.

    Desiree
    Edited on Mar 01, 12:20 because ''.

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