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Winter's Rose

 

 

 

 

When walking through the garden one day

I meandered past the tree of life when I became

enamoured by the most divine dark rose

that nature ever fashioned.

 

So astounding was the rose that I was robbed

of speech and breath. I fell onto my knees and

stared until my eyes hurt.

The poor dark rose had suffered lack of proper care,

resulting in an inert outer shell.

 

I took great care removing petals scarred from

Winter's callous touch. I was amazed to see inside

the tantalizing pink, dew covered flower open fore my eyes.

A sight so wondrous cannot pass without adverse effects

for those perhaps unlucky, perhaps most opportune of all.

 

I knelt, bereft of voice, devoid of breath and blind;

the rose, its beauty now replenished,

took great pity on this wretched soul of mine.

Perhaps it was the wind, perhaps it was celestial intervention,

maybe Earth itself began to shake;

 

You may beleive whatever you decide

but as I felt the rose incline in my direction

I knew then as I know now, no forces were at play

that fateful moment save the rose exerting her own will.

 

She chose to give herself to me that day.

When I felt her soft petals touch my hand

and smelled the dew that flowed onto my fingers,

life became clear. I knew my purpose on this planet

was to find this rose and love her evermore.

 

Caressing her long stem, I felt her shudder faintly

as I heard upon the wind a sigh of consummate contentment.

Leaning in to kiss the rose, to taste the sweet ambrosia

at her core, I knew that we were of one mind,

brought together by the strong embrace of love.

 

As I grasped her roots and pulled her from the only home

that she had ever known, I promised her that never more

would she endure the harsh effects of Winter's grip.

 

We walked together down the path that

leads I know not where.

 

It matters not, for we, together,

will abide whatever fate has planned for us.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Z E N D A - L O K K I

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  • SillyGillysGirl
    October 13

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    I like it very much, a vision of love of how we all want to fall, so dramatic and intense i think i shall read this a few more times until i become entranced by your ability to make this kind of love sound so possible


  • Antebellum
    July 10

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    Wow . this is incredible. I love how the background fits this piece aswell.
    thank you for entering, good luck

  • piccola silver member
    June 22
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    nice bg. I like the write also, thank you for the entry

  • Fantastic

    Zenda-Lokki,

    Shakespeare must have had a secret son, because you're in his bloodline sir.

    I've read just two of your poems, and already, you have secured yourself as one of, if not 'the' best poet I have had the pleasure of reading on Allpoetry. (I've been a member for three years).

    The Almighty Mongoose will be proud of the incredible love within this piece, every beautifully penned line bursting with wonder, and emotion. Makes me want to spread love, just reading it.

    Absolutely fantastic.

    Mongoose Bless!

    David.

  • DAMN! I mean wow. One of your tops five right here. It's a masterpeice!!!!!!!!!! THe emotion, the metephores, the idea and the wording it's absolutly perfect!


  • MuteForNow
    March 31

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    god you're amazing. hmmmmm. it's almost like a reply to the one that i wrote you that one time. at least in my mind, that's what i'd like to think of it.


  • Animarising
    March 31

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    My word

    Very interesting style. Unusual, prose -like quality in places. It has a strange, dark pull. I like it, so much I had to read it again.
    Watch the spelling mistake in line 20, but other than that, very good, enjoyable work.

    Bravo!


  • brianmc
    March 31

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    Brilliant

    A love story beyond compare. I don't think I will be able to look at any flower again without thinking of this beautiful write. bravo, bravo

  • Macsword
    March 31

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    I'm Not a Love Poem Guy but...

    Winter's Rose caught me reading it twice. Very well done and and what I believe to be a unique picture of love.

  • lovely

    wonderful poem.the expression of emotions and the imagery is excellent!


  • O Goldstein
    March 31

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    beautifully written


  • FaeRae gold member
    March 26
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    Amazing. A+ from a poet much less worthy to rate you.
    Blessed Be,
    ***Rae***

  • Sierraskye
    March 26
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    that made my day.
    it was stunning.


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    March 26

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    Applause-Applause-Applause!
    Beautifully written, flawless flow,
    what a joy to read and behold
    the ink and soul
    of the Winter Rose!

    way to write!
    lovely, lovely, lovely
    thankyou for the pleasure it was
    to read such marvelous poetic beauty!

  • only you could write something on this level of perfect.


  • CrystalLizard
    March 24

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    Thank you for the journey you've created—it's beautiful. I don't think I've read a poem about a flower that was so sensual and tender, almost erotic in the 7th stanza.

  • jln125
    March 24
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    Haunting

    This poem will stay with me...
    Thank you for it.

  • graybeard
    March 24
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    Exquisite

    As always I am humbled before your talent. Another excellent write from you.


  • musicofthepen
    March 24
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    this was absolutely amazing

  • aww so sweet

    I love this! You have left me speechless. Such great imagery and story lines. Wonderful flow! 4 applause!


  • lostsouls12
    March 24

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    you are just an awesome writer my fine gentleman. there are never enough words to describe anything you write bc the reader can never catch their breathe.


  • LadyElbereth
    March 24

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    Simple Lovely

    This is beyond the pale beyond beautiful. I loved each and every line for so descriptive your words literally took my breath away. I am amazed when I read a post of this magnitude…the blush of a rose would pale in comparison. My heartfelt thank you for this most wondrous Monet~


    Lady E

  • Stunning.


  • albymyheart gold member
    March 24

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    Brilliant!

    This really captivated me the whole way. What a lovely story you have woven around the winter's rose. The metaphores are subtle as the poem is tender. The whole write emits love, floating on the scent of that rose. Excellent write...alby


  • VierSinneNur
    March 24

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    Completely stunned by this. It's so well written, so descriptive. There is raw emotion in this that I could only imagine using. Superb, and please write on!


  • Kathraina silver member
    March 24

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    Wow, these words have truly stunned me.
    Absolutely brilliant write, the tale you tell is so tender and lovely. Many girls dream to be that rose picked by one man and to stay his forever.
    Bravo

    ♥ Kate

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