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Fragrance of Fear

I struggle to water
The Death Tree
But I smell the Fragrance of Fear
It will not leave

I appear to love the hairdo of life
it springs me to action
But I smell the Fragrance of Fear
It will not leave

I hear the silent call of hope
It lures me to the grave
But I smell the Fragrance of Fear
It will not leave

Then I smell an unfamiliar scent
It traps me, in a dugeon full of snakes
I have smelt the Fragrance of Fear
It has left me

Author notes

name: Chooooooooooooooky
i know its not good
lol
i wrote it in 15 minutes
sorry Ellen, Chooky and Nony

3 F) Fragrance of Fear


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  • MichaelLeeSmyth
    April 8

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    Love the first two lines, I enjoy this write quite a bit. It is the kind of work that many people can relate to, we all have our own palette of fragrances we deal with every day.
    well done
    Peace


  • Crazychook
    March 24
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    It's always difficult to write a poem from a title prompt, as there are so many possibilities and it leaves the mind reeling with what can be done. You did a good job. The repepetition works well and makes the poem tidy, especially at the end where it makes a definite finish, giving the reader a sense of completion.

    Thankyou for your entry.

    A.


  • Everlasting Ellen
    March 24

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    hahah! Okay... Niiiiice work Chooooooky, i love the flow and the repetition suits well, its got good poetic ability, and yeah I think its a great write


  • The Anonymous
    March 24

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    Thank you for your participation.

    Your poem will be reviewed later by all the three judges. It will be sheer effort and not any luck, that will decide the winner(s). You have an equal chance of winning as anyone else.

    M.


  • Blakkthought
    March 24
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    Good

    "I smell the fragrance of fear" Thats a pretty powerful line. I like this piece


  • SimplyNoodle
    March 24
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    Well written, and good luck in the contest. keep writting. =)
    ~ chelsey


  • hearts blossoms
    March 24

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    this is a great try the flow is good and natrual for a first attempt at dark i think you did good i liked the line
    "i hear the silent call of hope
    it lures me to the grave"
    this is agreat image here, maybe more metaphors of darkness could of been used but i feel this is very good
    abigai

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