It’s difficult
not to miss
the vividness of the dahlias
and the soft dew underneath
the bare foot
in the magical patch
that comes alive
every morning.
It’s difficult
not to be lost
in the fairytales
from the spirit of my grandma
in her cloudy attire
and the starry sparkles
when she is too tired
to be there for me.
Wouldn’t say the same
about the monotonous humming
of the ceiling fan
and the paranoia
that follows the end of the universe
and your perennial existence.
But it’s difficult
not to miss
the dancing smoke
that erotically evolves
into the lady muse
in the middle of
lonely nights.
In a world
of artificial intelligence
and artificial flavors,
of artificial insemination
and artificial smiles,
it’s difficult
not to miss
artificial bliss.
Spinning into
a higher consciousness
where Neruda and Kubrick
swiftly start making
much more sense
it’s difficult
not to miss
contemplating over
the allegories of life
and metaphysics.
But moon-walking
in the esoteric realms
of surrealism
lady muse took
a curiously human shape
the other day
and it was much more difficult
to neglect her words
when she refused
to be made of smoke any longer
while promising to explore with me
the radiance of the universe
and its unreachable heights
without any of the usual
artificiality.
And that is exactly
what she did.
A contest entry
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Comments
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Great imagry!
Thanks for entering!
-Dlvvanzor -
Very deep and thought provoking write... you have excellent meter, and the imagery really took me places... I felt my feet get wet.. I felt my granny again... Thank you so much for the enty
Lilian
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forgot the applause.
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Uniquely Captivating!
This was amazing! (and still is!) Wow! I love these lines so much:
"In a world
of artificial intelligence
and artificial flavors,
of artificial insemination
and artificial smiles,
it’s difficult
not to miss
artificial bliss."
Your descriptions and imagery is phenomenal! I love the ending so much! What a unique perspective and write!
This captivated my senses and imagination and the wit you entertwined was just like icing on a cake!
Well done and so enjoyed reading!
Bravo!
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thank you for this fine entry and i wish you the best of luck in this contest. viyanna rosemarie
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thank you for your comments. This is a lovely contest idea. And I added the author name to my author notes. I wasn't being able to do it earlier due to some hassles. And this is not a PW exactly as I'd written it for this contest but submitted it earlier as the contest was temporarily closed for judging.
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This poem is deep and at the same time it makes
you think. I like the images your word has painted
and I especially liked the second and third verse.
Good luck in the contest.
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I love the whole thing but lets see a favorite part would probably be "Wouldn’t say the same about the monotonous humming of the ceiling fan and the paranoia" Mainly because of the image I got of a wooshing ceiling fan and the thought of that sound added to the feeling of sleeplessness that the poem is supposed to be about for your contest. WHICH I wish you the best of luck in.
Keep em' Coming.
-AJ
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