I can take you under my wings,
Keep you from the thunder.
I promise you that I can protect us,
Protect us forever.
I want to make you mine,
Better believe that I'm ready to fight,
I'll fight to the end,
Because you're my angel,
Girl you're my best friend
And because you're there for me,
I could never sing,
Another song
About a girl that is gone.
And that angel that you prove to be,
Is what makes you my light.
Keeping me out of the dark,
Keeping me away from harm.
So I have one request, will you let me hold you in my arms?
Revising is needed I'll have a better version up soon. No worries.
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i c you titled this,
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this is a nice poem
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of course I will let you hold me in your harms...lol...but ummm...yea this poem gave off so much love and passion it was beautiful! Every line brought something new to the poem and in a gud way i must add! Nice to know that there is someone who thinks that about you and would take the time to write a poem about how awesome you are! The poem no doubt is an inspirtation to many people and i believe that it could make someone tear up cuz it sure did make me tear up lol. it's a sweet and adoralb poem with some major strength and power....it shows some real feelings of the way people feel these days and it's hard to write that down on paper and type it up and try to explain it but you did an excellent job. I love the last line....it really did take push it off the edge of brilliant! I don't even know how to explain! Lol....my favorite part was "I promise you that I can protect us,//Protect us forever." It was so cute..okay i'm done...I think your an amazing writter and keep up the great work
Dont Lose The ONE
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Oh, gah.
This shatters my heart in every single way. Every word of this was so sincere.
She's a lucky girl.
(:
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It's a great poem, seems like you had a hard time closing, but that could just be my interpretation. No complaints about it though. If it's a real life story than good luck with your lady
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