Echo far
echo near,
find your world
get the hell out of here.
Life is hard
to dark for sweetness,
take the bitter taste
and use it.
We are one
we are all,
we stand alone
and randomly we fall.
Lead the way
lead alone,
echo
echo home.
Author notes
Option 2 dark
3-23-09
A contest entry
- Songs of Darkness by zhaniswolf.
400 points, ended June 6, 32 entries
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Comments
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You have a flow here that is slightly broken in some places, but I almost feel those places should be emphasized lol. "Get the hell out of here" "echo home" love those lines. thank you for entering.
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thank you and yah!!
yah i like those lines as well...and i as well think that this poem has a weird flow..hahaha i think its this part:
Life is hard
to dark for sweetness,
take the bitter taste
and use it.
: i think!!...also i think it kind of jumps a little...(talking about selling your self out...hahaha)...but overall i am content..i was trying to think about darkness when it comes to life and i kind of got inspired and angry...thus my 'echo' was born!!
hahaha...(..phsst.....poets!)
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^^
it is a kind of poem you don't here anymore the simple and sweet poems you will remeber for your life...i see i bright road ahead for you if you became a world known poet...
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thank you soo much!!..i'll try to becom a poet then!! hahahaha
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