crash of thunder, flash of flame
a steady hand and perfect aim
sound of death, touch of hell
smell of brimstone, a life i quell
a single shot fired in the dead of night
with a single shot i became death's knight
within my hands death's wish i hold
with my life death's story is told
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Hmmm...a talk of death always draws me in. Interesting poem. I thought it to be very good. I love the rhyme it stays on topic and doesn't stray. That would be something else i like about it. It's a good write.
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crash of thunder, flash of flame
a steady hand and perfect aim
sound of death, touch of hell
smell of brimstone, a life i quell
a single shot fired in the dead of night
with a single shot i became death's knight
within my hands death's wish i hold
with my life death's story is told
this poem just reach out and grabb
you in and run with it wow
nice job shug -
WOO! 5th responce!
yeah I know i'm crazy I felt like putting that in there ^^
any who ..... on with the poem critisisim (sp?)
I like this style you have, it's and easy flow and read but it's deep cutting into the emotions which is exactly what a poem should be, well done mate
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love it!
that freakishly good. i love it soo much.. i wont more!
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Wow hun. I love it. It's perfectly wonderful, just like all your other poems. Great imagery.
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Wow, I'm speechless. This is a wonderful write, full of imagery and just dark enough for me. Wonderful, simply wonderful.
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I really like this. The details are good and I can picture everything as I read it. The flow is great as well. Great job and keep on writing!!!
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