Standing at the open door
Looking upon the secretive world with anger
at a man who calls himself a valiant soldier fighting a violent war
Seeking vengeance for a crime that never should have taken place
Behind you is the former challenges that you seek to forget
The moments that visit you in sleep with persistent frequency
You've been searching for victory in this battle you've waged within yourself
Hiding behind some false hope of a world without judgements and favouritism
Standing at this open door gazing upon the shell of a man
I realise now all that we had is finished
I have lost you to this unforgiving land.
A contest entry
- Picture,and word bank by misticmoonlite.
800 points, ended April 2, 9 entries
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hmm very thought provoking. Excellent work. Short and to the point. Thanks for entering this you've got 4 poems in the contest so the points will be divided. You've made an 18 on this poem. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you. Kahy
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So much truth here. I would have never guessed this came from a word bank and a pic. Excellent penning. Best wishes,
Frogz~
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Land is definately unforgiving...Beautiful work.
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The evils of conflict without understanding the true meanings of the so called enemy and the real intentions of our so called leaders becomes a disappointment when we learn the truth for life is stranger than fiction and it hurts to know we are following the wrong truths..it is no wonder we become disalusioned and trust nobody in our melancholy ..your insightful poem reflects these emotions ..good one poet
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very sad
and well digested of word useages,I can picture this with out a picture prompt, thank you for this entry
MM
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this is truly sad. but beautiful at the same time.
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Thank you for your lovely comments, I put a lot of work into this piece and it's nice to know that you like it.
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wow!
this is strong, very sad. that is poetry should do be able to change your mood upon one read of it. I say excellent job. thanks Nic
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NICE! LOVE IT TO DEATH. ESPECIALLY THE LAST TWO OR THREE LINES. XD
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