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what sinister liquid




            the lustful ocean
  strokes the shoulder of the shore
        but she'll not have him







 

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  • kezi411
    October 25
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    wow
    as small as that was...its filled with so much passion!
    keep writing!
    you have a great gift


  • Heroesrox silver member
    March 31

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    Wowzies. Great job. I really like how short this was, but how it had such a great emotional impact! Thanks for a wonderful share! Best wishes.


  • MelodiousMe
    March 28
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    you know sometimes the high tide comes in and the ocean's rath is finally unleashed for holding back for so long... it seem's like no matter what, we will always lose in the end... lust or love, pride or respect, so you know what i do? I remember the part where she strokes him, it's really such a beautifull sight, isn't it?


  • XLadyElinorX
    March 23

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    stunning. . . .

    oh wow. in those three lines speaks something powerful and gripping. . .it's stunning, poet. so brief and yet there's something stirring in it I can't quite say. . .marvelous.

    ♠ Lady Elinor