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Unheard Cries

I the sinner hidden in shame.
I the witch tempting pain.
I the cripple.  My heart is lame.
I hear the beating rain.

I know that I should not be here
I know that I should live in fear.

I Magdalen of modern day.
I Judas of the soul.
Wicked I, know not how to pray.
Hid in the deepest hole.

Lord can I ever be brought back
or is there something that I lack.

I am lost from the light of grace.
I feel something is gone.
I will never regain the place
where the children belong.

Still my God is there a place for me?
Is it worthless for me to be?

Author notes

I'm still working on it. Like the third stanza the last two lines I don't really like those right now. Not really fond of the last line in the first stanza either. Anyway it was inspired by the Poem "Prayer" that Frodofan wrote.

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  • Frodofan silver member
    March 22
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    Definently could be elaborated on. Let me know if you add more. Glad to have been inspiring.


  • docbill gold member
    March 22

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    Neat

    I Magdalen of modern day.
    I Judas of the soul.
    Wicked I, know not how to pray.
    Hid in the deepest hole.

    IMHO

    Dump the word "wicked", it disrupts the flow.

    Leve the rest alone.

    Bill