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the great old pine

Missing image

standing tall

master of this domain.
thousands of years

on earth it still remain's.

even though the tree is old.
in its hart It's filled with gold.

slowly it slips into
an everlasting slumber.
hoping not to become
just another piece of lumber.

inside its hart still shines
reaching skyward
with all the other

great old pines.

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  • the ripple
    March 31
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    Enjoyed reading this poem


  • itsman
    March 28
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    very good write... i like the imagery...


  • Lowell Poe
    March 27

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    Ahhh....the lads a chip off the old block.
    The mighty dweller of the forest.
    Could smell that beauty....
    sweet......
    Good job here...
    Let nature sing !

    Lowell Poe.


  • Lizzie-Moffat
    March 26

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    Bloody hell! You write fantastic for your age group. like you are only 14 and you can write like heaps friggin good!

  • Rowan gold member
    March 26

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    I've always said, when I die I want my ashes buried and a tree planted on top, but then I think what if someone makes me into a coffee table, or worse yet, a toilet seat. lol. Wouldn't that be ironic. I guess it would be payback for all the times I said, kiss my arse...

    Nice write, well said.


  • FaeRae gold member
    March 26

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    This is an amazing piece of work for your age or any other. This reminds me of "Walden" by H.D. Thoreau. Can't think of a better compliment.
    Blessings,
    Rachele


  • hisaddiction
    March 26
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    i liked it, you write well...very nice


  • AllexisReed
    March 24

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    OMG (can I say that?) I was blown away with the picture first...just yesterday when I was laying on the ground looking up at the sunshine I thought of taking a picture of the trees the way I saw them...this is it exactly, and then the words!! Bravo

  • piccola silver member
    March 23

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    I love pine trees. We used to live near Sequoia ... the giant redwoods? The greatness of it all. So majestic and inhaling the scent all around. It really was and is a reminder of God.


  • Hetha gold member
    March 23

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    It's lovely and filled with wonderful imagery. Did you mean ' hart' or 'heart' In L6 and L11? Otherwise, I like how you give reverence and majesty to the pines.


  • stepbystep
    March 23

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    ahh...i LOVE this!!! (:
    and the tree goes perfectly with it.
    cant wait to check out more of your upcoming poetry.

  • justin817200
    March 22
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    nature is beauty


  • log-home-guy-Nic
    March 22
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    nice Job


  • Nicsnowdemon silver member
    March 22
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    its short but its got hart

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