A girl like you is impossible to find.
I always thought that I knew what love was,
but when I met you my whole conception of the word changed.
You took everything that I thought was real,
and made me realize that there is so much more than what I've been given.
My heart now knows what "true love" should feel like,
so I can never go back to the way things were.
You are the closest thing to perfection in my eyes,
I just love every single thing about you.
From your green eyes and beautiful skin,
to your heartwarming smile and loving embrace.
I just want to hold you forever in my arms,
and never let you go.
There's no doubt in my mind that what I'm feeling is real.
And I know that you feel the same way,
so just open up your heart and allow me to come in.
I promise that there's nothing to fear,
I would never allow something to come between what I want more than anything.
...I want you and me to be together...
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Aww aren't you just a sweet little mushy man But yeah... I'll save my ranting for something else, save you some precious time hehe. This was sweet. And cute. And makes me want to throw up XD
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forgot the clapping... face things o.O
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I really like this piece. When I read it my mind made all these changes to the situation I'm in and I could write it the same but obviously not about 'Julia'
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Thanks a lot. haha
At least I didn't put a name in the poem.
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I love it! I think in the very last line it should be "you and I" idk. Just a thought. anyway. Great write!
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It could, but it's not wrong to say "me".
Plus being that I'm saying "I want", I wouldn't want to add more I's in there.
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this is stellar.
it will forever make me smile.
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this is an amazing poem. great job.
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Great write...for some reason it made me think of a Bon Jovi song, "we danced so close, we danced so slow, and I swore I'd never let you go, together forever, never say goodbye..." Yea. Nice piece!
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This is very sweet justin. Tony has written me a few poems but i always wished he'd write me more. Every girl loves a romantic poem. This is beautiful, genuine and full of emotion. I love it!! Take care of urself and that fragile heart of yours. <3Jaymie
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I wish someone would tell me that or even feel that way about me I give a 5 no joke -
oh this is amazing doll!!! i wouldn't change one thing about it!!! keep it up hunny!!
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wow, Justin, this is really good. it almost made me cry, but idk if it's for a good or bad reason so plz dnt ask. it's still a really good write. nice job.
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This was very nice. Your emotion comes thru with both guns blazing. I would make the following changes:
Your next to last line, remove the word "in". and your last line switch "me and you" to "You and me".
Keep writing.
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Thanks a lot man. :]
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The emotion in this is so real and emphatic that it makes it wonderful to read.
Just one thing: "There's no doubt in my mind that what I'm feeling isn't real" sounds like you know what you're feeling is fake. It's the thing with double negatives that's doing it.
I really did enjoy reading it! Probably because I recently met someone who made a very deep impression on me, but this poem affected me more than it normally would.
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That's what I thought! I was unsure though. haha
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I clicked this because the dearest person in my life, my sister, has the same name. Then I stayed because of the depth of innocent beauty and faltering steps of true emotions the spill forth. This is a sweetly immature poem where the subject is what matters most!
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thats such a sweet poem, and your emotion really came through. line 5 is a little long, you might want to make it more concise. another suggestion would to use more description, when you describe her do it in more detail so we can really see her ect. other than that it was great! (i like the first line!)
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I took some of your advice. Although I need to think more on the description.
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hey i dunno if you want more advice on the description but an easy way to do that is when you say "green eyes and beautiful skin" just add like deep green eyes and beautiful smooth skin. or compare her skin/eyes to something else you think is nice. also this line "I just love every single thing about you." take out the "just" (i like concise things, obviously it's just my opinion)
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This is a touching piece. It makes me remember what it felt like to be in love (which I haven't been in love in a very long time, but such is my life). Anyway keep writing and letting your feelings out.
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