The golden sun
Paints my face with shimmering warmth
But it is raining
In my heart
Overcome
Pouring from within
Floods, churning with uncertainty
Break me open
Yet the wounds yield no blood
But seep
With a cold, foreboding, creeping
Fear
And I am lost
(within myself)
I have built a fortress
To which I,
Alone,
Hold the key
Affording protection?
From the unknown…
An impenetrable barrier
So mighty, so strong
Guarding- imprisoning-
My heart
(full of longing)
For truth, for courage, for…
…love
The walls are but
Stepping stones
Leading him to me
As my lonely groans
Rise above
Clouding out the sun
(overshadowing)
Destiny
For as unworthy a charge
As I
His affection
Gentle and pure
Saves not with force
But a quiet, flowing
Assurance
Of my worth
(in his eyes)
I find the courage
To release the torrent
Pain, fear
Storming, away
And left within me
Emptiness, disarray
(restoration)
For my shattered emotions
Convalesce
In his quiet strength
I am bound once again
(entirely powerless)
To resist his love
Author notes
Interpret however you so please-
for my prince charming, for my God, for my Savior...
A contest entry
- 'Welcome to Sfallgimon' by Invite Only by Sir Pelleas.
950 points, ended April 20, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments please! Critiques welcomed and desired! :-)
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A lot of work has gone into this one, and it shows too.
Very well taken and brings out a list of thoughts and emotions that can be related too.
Thank you for entering and for sharing such a great piece.
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you word choice was amazing, i mean you really just write so effortlessly, very jealous. :]
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Haha, thanks so much! Wish this was as effortless to write as you thought, but I appreciate the compliment. ;-)
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Loved this, and I'm sure He loves it too.
All the best,
mj.
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Thanks so much.
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This simply beautiful! and tugs at the heart strings...to open ones heart is to give completely..be it man or the Creator of all life...breath taking and i thank you for sharing it with me and for entering
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I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for the comment. :-)
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