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Highway and the silent stars

footsteps chase myself -
starlight's black encasement
stretch these stepping stones;
pale miles.

silent white and gold
invite your hands across me
whispers sigh my bones;
I heard a secret


night's traffic raced me home










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  • tarcus
    April 7
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    third time lucky


  • Never Fall in Love
    March 27
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  • loafy
    March 22

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    You have a twilight anomorphic dimentia thing going on here, like a time relapse, if you know what I mean. Can give somebody a nice headache. Great metaphors.


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    March 22

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    well done,
    I enjoyed the ending alot, it
    pulled the whole piece together.
    It has a great flow. Very nice job.

    Loveandblessings2u & yours always
    Joyce


  • tara wilson gold member
    March 22

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    beautiful poem enjoyed this...


  • Nakatrea
    March 22
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    *sigh* Still the best Marty..still the best.


  • Poetic Tasha Moderators member
    March 22

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    well done hun, i like the subtle rhyme in this one - something most people can't figure out how to do, looks like a winner to me
    best of luck

    love, light & laughter
    Tasha


  • The Phoenix Returns
    March 22

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    I am still thinking how to interpret this. And that is a good thing. Your words somehow excite me. And i will re-read this a few times again while judging.

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