i
She wishes to own a houseboat
on a quiet, clean lake,
where she wouldn't smell the stink
of garbage cans full of snake skins
of her color changing "relatives".
ii
She wants to live
where she can suffice the fish
with just a few pinches of fish food,
and sense little achievements
sans over-expectations.
iii
She wants to own a porch
within herself;
sitting where, she is "herself",
overlooking naivety of life.
iv
Not using canned food,
she wants to cook from scratch,
cutting selected tomatoes,
crushing the apt amount of spices
to slurp pastas of originality,
without the mix of deceptive forks.
v
She wishes that
he was just the cake batter --
soft and adjustable
and she would have kept him
rum-free.
But his words contain alcohol
(in high percentage)
and his love is ambidextrous --
both hands away from her.
A contest entry
- Be published in the next Allpoetry Book! Theme: Grief by Kevin.
800 points, ended May 15, 111 entries
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Great Job!!!!
I like these lines the best:
She wishes that
he was just the cake batter --
soft and adjustable
and she would have kept him
rum-free.
But his words contain alcohol
(in high percentage)
and his love is ambidextrous --
both hands away from her.
I like the form in which you wrote this poem. Nice job. Good Work and Good Luck!! -
Very nicely done!
"She wants to live
where she can suffice the fish
with just a few pinches of fish food,
and sense little achievements
sans over-expectations"
This was my favorite part!
The simple things seem to be what she needs without the termoil.
Great write!
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Were this true....
"and sense little achievements
sans over-expectations."
for all of us to be satisfied such.
Good write poet. Very readable. And these lines:
"and his love is ambidextrous --
both hands away from her."
a poem of itself.
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Er OK this very intrigueing image packe set of verse is well crafted and so readable ...some great wordart here poet
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WOW
this is amazing.. alot of different emotions
very thought provoking... i love this write -
"She wishes"...very interesting write..The thoughts of this woman are varied, but on topics of family and love....a most abstract write...
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I'm not quite sure whether the subject is a lizard, snake, cameleon, or human. Nevertheless, this is a very profoundly, thought-provoking write. I can see the houseboat waiting near the serene and quiet shore... and I wish it could be mine, sometimes, too... Thank you for sharing your muse's briliance with all of us. I'm wishing you all the best!! Take care & keep it flowing, Poet!! Peace, xx Cyn xx 
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very nice..I can tell from reading other's comments that they too like your writing style. I'll be checking back to see what else you have to offer...thanks for sharing...keep it up! peace to you always in all ways...
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Excellent
A very fine write, indeed. You have expressed your thoughts quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us.
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A terrific poem that is effectively sparse, and has an exquisite imagistic simplicity.
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She wishes that
he was just the cake batter --
soft and adjustable
and she would have kept him
rum-free.
Wow, a brilliant write, I loved the emotion that seeped from this piece =) and I love the ideas "a porch within herself"
you've established too many deep themes to mention.
A brilliant write, congrats
Ollie
xxx
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Awesome in the way you have painted this very original piece with terrific hues of "speaking" images!! Mind-blowing
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This is a really inventive take on the prompt
I really like the way that you created this - and I love the snake skins of the first stanza thank you for entering!
Polly
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