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On My Way ...


My joy for an unknown future lies
with blind-hope for all that’s blurred
compete, defeat or delete
each challenge I meet -
Conscious of grace and
breathing space

I go …

My truth for unanswered questions lies
with blind-faith for the written word
retreat ~ re-treat or retreat -
with a sense for delights
or a rise-to-heights
silent place

I go ...




© 2009 Joy A. Burki-Watson

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  • Mirthryl
    March 25

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    Lovely form, rhyme and internal rhyme. Excellent "Conscious of grace and/breathing space/I go." Thoughtful joy and truth based on faith and hope. I enjoyed this very much.


  • bigperm gold member
    March 25

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    "do not go gently into that good night"

    I find that one must be bold in finding their way. Who knows what the future holds for us? You must have the gumption to percevier, or you'll get swept underneath a rug like dust , only to be walked on by the self richous. As for blind faith answering your questions: that presents a fine line. You have to find your own truths by studying history and living through experience, not merley copping out to the -I believe this because someone I'm to trust told me so. So yes, do go...and go well.


  • pixiestix gold member
    March 23

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    My first thought is your message is one of peace...peace of mind knowing if you accept whatever comes your way with an open heart and mind it will serve your greater good.

    Great wisdom and beautifully written Joy


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    March 23

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    Ah, Joy, what a dynamic visual,
    which, to me, appears like
    a whirling tornado,
    which is Joy,
    going!!

    Great concept, great form,
    great work!!!

    M-C


  • Sunshine Always
    March 22

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    "I don't know where I'm going, but I'm on my way". I love this Joy as it speaks much to my own mind of late. Like the way this one rolls down the page my friend..Excellent...mal


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    March 22

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    well written and well versed in a rhyming scheme, thank you for this cute entry to my contest...
    YEp it shows now, thank you, good luck
    mm

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