Silence gathers upon your tongue,
Coating it in promises that have grown stale and words that can’t seem to be spoken.
You are a rose destined to wilt.
You look for miracles in the stars,
But really, all your asphalt irises see is burning gas encircling the night sky.
You never were very good at seeing beauty.
And clocks didn’t really mean a thing to you.
Forever was a conjunction between ‘For’ and ‘Ever’, and never did it hold any meaning.
It was a strange day when you died internally.
Your lungs, they crashed.
Breathless words wishing to be respired couldn’t surface, leaving your throat blocked.
I guess you never really spoke much to begin with though…
And then your eyes glossed.
There was a sheen of perspiration layering your pupils, and you choked.
You always were blind to life.
Author notes
Oh, just doubled checked the rules and i accidently wrote for all 5 words :/
--Hope it still qualifies..
Prompt:
1)Silence
2)Miracles
3)Forever
4)Breathless
5)Blind
A contest entry
- 5 words to tickle your muse! by Beauty Of Silence.
900 points, ended April 4, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - infinite spaces between atoms by whiterabbit..
500 points, ended April 15, 26 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
If you wanted honesty;; Then that's all you had to say.
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This is wonderful hun. I love the way that you write and I'm so jealous because I've been having fxcking writer's block lately. I love the way that the words just seem to flow and there's nothing forced about it. There's a quality that lets you know if people have talent or not, and you definitely have it.
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"Silence gathers upon your tongue,
Coating it in promises that have grown stale and words that can’t seem to be spoke.
You are a rose destined to wilt."
Fabulous!
Although, "words that can't seem to be spoke." ----> "words that can't seem to be spoken."
"too you." ----> "to you."
"It was a strange day when you died internally."
I adore the bluntness of this statement, it really fits
Shelly
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There was a sheen of perspiration layering your pupils, and you choked.
Ooh, gah.
I love this to every single syllable and back.
I envy your ability to use word banks... I'm not too sure I could do them and come out with something as spectacular as this.
LOVE this.
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HAHAS lol yeash this definitely still qualifies one word: WHOA! this is just AMAZING! yea the lines are pretty darn long, maybe you could chop em up here and there, make them more "flowy" but heyy, your imagery totally made up for that. the imagery here, and the metaphors were simple stunning! lovely job, thanks for this entry, all the best
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holy banana!! I was hooked by the title and then as soon as I started to read I was lost to anything else. this is amazing! your imagery is so gorgeuos and I dont really have much else to say other than I think my eyeballs just exploded at its beauty!!
"But really, all your asphalt irises see is burning gas encircling the night sky" <== would have to be my favourite line and i dont even know why.
good luck in the contest.
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Wow this is brilliant. I was hooked by the very title. I particularly liked the last line, "You were always blind to life". Well done!
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