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yes i am sure

She tried to discern if he was gay,
by rubbing her breasts on his back.
And laughing whole heartedly at his jokes.
Even staring hard with her mouth wide open.
She passed judgment and discounted him,
until she encountered his wife and two daughters.

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  • NightshadeNymph
    April 1
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    Mmm

    I love it. Such a nice stabbing twist.


  • CinderellaSyndrome
    March 22
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    Great.
    But.
    You didn't follow the rules.

  • J Macabre gold member
    March 22

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    Wow.
    That's really cool. Someone judging someone and then finding out the hard way that they were wrong.
    Simply great!