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See

I see your heartbeat parading around me in syncopated cycles
with dancers and wild animals, snarling for domination.

I see your pulse ricocheting light through deep caverns so
spelunkers can find their way home from challenges.

I see your sweat hitting pavements making concrete beg
to be fertile ground so it can grow food

I see in a way that other people cannot see,
in my blindness, I see how much you love me.

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  • Beauty Of Silence
    March 22
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    WOW!

    the last stanza was the most powerful to me. it was so simple, yet it just wrapped this entire poem so falwlessly. it was short (thank you) and i love the adjetives and metaphors used here. wonderful imagery too. just what i wanted thanks for the entry, all the best