Running
falling
darkness.......
i open my eyes
and they open to dark rimmed teeth
and hot breath breathing in my face
hot breath smelling of decaying flesh
all i can remember is
running from somthing
somthing big.
i wiggle my finger and move my arms.
then i lift up my hand
and jab the great beast in the eye.
the dark rimmed teeth disappear and so does the breath.
i jump up to see a werewolf looking at me.
ready to strike again.
but i jump for a stick.
i hit the ground again i am now bleeding.
the stick it sharp.
i reach in my pocket for somthing metal.
i find a metal piece
i attach it to the wood with a hair tie
then in the blink of an eye
i jab the wolf in the heart.
the wolf goes limp on top of me.
i knew what the great beasts weaknes was.
for metal is deadly to those werewolves.
that is what saved me.
i now never have to see those dark rimmed teeth again.
except for in my nightmare.
that i will fear.
I runn to the road and jump in my truck.
then speed to the hospital.
i must have passed out in the waiting room
because when i woke up i was in a bed with stiches all over me.
I tell the doctor what happened
he did not belive me.
he said it mush have been just a regular wolf.
i had just been delusional.
but i will stick to this story that i am telling.
for i was alone in the woods that day fighting.
Author notes
dark rimmed teeth
was my prompt
hope you like it.
g r u m p y b r a t 2 0
grumpybrat20
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so you like it? it came so easaly.
Comments
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I love this!
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this is a nice story/poem. i enjoyed reading it.
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Hey you believe in your story.
What happens in those woods stays in those woods,huh?
Anyway this was a cool piece, kind of almost like a story instead of a poem though..
either way i liked it.. i enjoyed reading it.
-MaNDI
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Nice lol
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good :
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This is an interesting take on the prompt - I like the imagination that this piece has, and the part about the doctor not believing you seems to come straight from a horror story, it is always the way! Thank you for entering
Polly
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Nice
This was a nice piece. The repeating of your words works well with this write. You took the prompt you were given and ran with it. Nice job and thank you for entering! -
i liked how repetative you were with words. it made what you said stand out more. it made it pop. though i think you did it more in the begining of the poem.
but i really do like it. i like werewolves.
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Excellent piece of poetry
penned here! This was
a pleasure to read.
Thanks for entering & best of luck -
great imagination in this poem.
Favorite lines:
"I tell the doctor what happened
he did not belive me.
he said it mush have been just a regular wolf.
i had just been delusional.
but i will stick to this story that i am telling.
for i was alone in the woods that day fighting."
Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest -
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thank you for you kind words. i realy love that part of my poem to.
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Good imagination and poem.
Eric
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thank you for the comment!
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Strong work, keep it up!
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thank you for your comment.
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Your prompt is: dark rimmed teeth
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