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A simple love

  I love her, and she loves me,
    this is our destiny,
  We love each other,
  we are lovers.
  This is fate bringing us together, forever.
    I'm happy when she hugs me.
    When I kiss her I mean it.
    This is happiness at last,
    this makes us forget our darkened past.
  a simple love between us,
  is enough for a while,
    this love is not for a child.
  We love each other.
 
 

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  • Sharon Marie gold member
    May 9

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    good

    I did like the sense of humor at the end
    this love is not for a child
    best part I liked was A simple love between us
    the part I would change would be Is enough for awhile to Is enough for all eternity. well done


  • txchick
    April 14
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    Cool.

    I like how you rhymed sometimes in the poem. Very nice love poem. Good Job.