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Unheard.(Hay(na)ku)

I'm
Still sinning
Wisdom words unheard

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  • The Fun House silver member
    April 17

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    Pretty much sounds like life to me. We do what we do and keep telling ourselves not to, but we do it anyway


  • howler monkey
    April 4

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    hmm

    this one made me think a little. i like the meaning and i dont i guess.. i'm unsure if i make since. what im trying to say is that i dont like the fact that the word is goin unheard.. but i feel like thats not true i think the word was heard it just wasn't listened to. and i like it because so many people feel this way and its easy to relate to because even if you do hear the words and you listen you still sin.. everybody sins. i really really like this peice and i like the fact that you went out of the box. i think thats awesome.


  • Mr Id
    March 21

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    This is a form I have not come across before, so thanks for introducing it to me.

    I am not sure about the syntax of the last line though. It spoils the rest of it for me, as I don't know how to read it, or what to take away from it.

    Good luck in contest!