a million notes sayin sorry
you haven't replied to a single one
you were the only one i wanted, the only one
but the booze tells another story
White wall stained with love
tells me all i need to know
White wall stained with hate
gives me a ?better? show
white wall stained with blood
watch the gushing river flow
white wall stained with dirt
never nearly pure as snow
the moon rises black
showing us her darker side
the moon rises not
telling us she's only lied
the moon rises full
speaking of the nights she cried
*chorus*
windows of my desire
love for you kindles like fire
she broke in as a trier
now they call me a crier
just cuz i'm sorry
the door remains closed
leaving me with but one choice
the door remains locked
not one person to hear my voice
my life has now stopped
no one to show the path
my mind has just blown
nothing left in my skull
my mind has just left
now i'm bored and dull
*chorus*
windows of my desire
love for you kindles like fire
she broke in as a trier
now they call me a crier
just cuz i'm sorry
booze just took control
stumbling all over the place
booze just took something
to your house, it's a race
booze just took my hate
one time, i'll let you call me two face
relationships hurt
never again shall i bow
relationships fake
leaving me to question how
relationships lie
i'm worse off fot it now
white walls get stained
the moon tells us all
doors open and close
lives begin and end
minds are insane or normal
booze takes all you have
and relationships do all
Author notes
like a slow metallica kinda, but just as fast for the guitar. lol. i have a fascination with guitar solos
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booze gets people in alot of trouble (._.) i really like the use of the walls to tell the story of conditions within the person grappling with the addiction. i didnt hear metallica in my head like you said in your notes til i read that and applied a softer metallica to it and yah i totally can hear it like that, my first impression was actually Marylin Manson
with guitar solos 
high marks for quality of message and metaphors 
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Relationships are a mirror of your SELF. Untill we change ourselves we cannot change others.The worst punishment God gives us is throu relationships.
We do not know who ever comes to us is our friend or enemy in disguise. -
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i guess i've never heard it put that way. this one isn't really about me, i've had a good relationship w/ my gf for like 4 months now. this one's more about a friend, kinda. the booze part is part of a relationship i was in, and that one ended gently, but the rest is his story, and even from her friends point of view, he did nothing wrong. she cheated on him, stole his stuff, valuable stuff, and numerous other things.
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