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Sandi Alford's Tour de Force

Break of Day

 

Walk with me as daylight breaks
her age-old fragile smile
bearing witness as she awakes

The morning crisp and juvenile
from dainty streaks to quilted hues
her age-old fragile smile

Everywhere nature takes her cues
bursting forward in her glory
from dainty streaks to quilted hues

Hearken now and hear her story
life has ceased its hibernation
bursting forward in her glory

Foundation built by Master Mason
green mold on ragged rocks; behold!
Life has ceased its hibernation

Torrents of color and sounds unfold
green mold on ragged rocks; behold!
Walk with me as daylight breaks
bearing witness as she awakes.

 

 

Golden Holly

 

I had a vision Christmas night,
while sitting blue in candle light.
Bereft of strength, good will and cheer
with naught but loneliness this year,
a wonderment had filled my sight.

The mellow glow from candle’s wick
had sputtered pink and silver quick!
I thought my eyes had played a game
and rubbed them as wee figures came,
though startled, was not feeling sick.

The air was laced with fragrant mist
all cranberry and chocolate kissed,
and by the windows soon appeared
a twinkling tree with star that cheered,
this tattered room had sorely missed.

My soul had warmed as did the room
for hearth held fire in its womb,
and there above; as over door
hung golden holly to adore,
its glitter hues displaced the gloom.

Poinsettias’ velvet; red and white
replaced the dust on shelves just right,
as each soft petal held a smile
adding festive flair with style,
and ended loneliness’s blight.

It’s then I woke too much surprise
t’was not a vision touched my eyes,
but a real visit by fairies: three
that spruced the room with life for me.
This special gift; my heart shall prize!

 

Oh Sacred Orb...
my heart so seeks release!

Oh radiant beams from ancient orb above,
come cleanse my soul of bitter cold drawn nigh.
Cast wretched gray away this day I cry--
Send rays of light to steal this winter's glove.
I yearn to hear the cooing of a dove,
a moment when the ground is simply dry.
Imploring now, "Oh please do not be shy.
Please fill this void with warming rays of love."

While slumbering you heard my solemn plea.
Through chilling snow this force of fire shows change.
With blessed joy, my heart, it only sings!
So sweet this orb of light has been to me.
An Earth now lush from mire, is it strange?
Rejoicing in the healing touch it brings.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 


Author notes

Break of Day - Terzanella
Golden holly - Quintella
Oh Sacred Orb - Petrarchan Sonnet

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  • Peripatetic gold member
    April 19

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    The Terzanelle has beautiful & compelling images. Like the Sonnet which follows, it has a hymn-like quality in its extolling of the morning's virtues.
    The sequences of lines & rhyme fall as expected until the quatrain. The author chooses to go with the less common fFAA scheme vs. the more conventional fAFA. Maybe I prefer the more conventional, but it is not my poem!
    The poem's meter is irregular both in feet and syllable count. This makes the rhythm a little difficult to access, but going back to the hymn-like quality, if one imagines long & short notes, the flow becomes easier to follow.

    The Quintilla evokes Clement Moore's "The Night before Christmas" as well as the fairy tales like the cobbler & the elves. It is a delightful narrative in which a state of mind is transformed along with the ambience of the rooms. The iambic tetrameter breaks down at lines 17, 24 & 28, but it does not appear that this would be difficult to fix based on the poet's excellent use of IT in the rest of the poem.

    In the Sonnet we are reminded of how the end of winter, even the end of cold early spring rains, is eagerly awaited. Especially in cooler climes, summers are short and treasured for the sun's too brief, warm hegemony in a cloudless sky.
    The meter & flow are perfect. Even more than in the Terzanelle, this seems a hymn as much as a poem.


  • Darkwell
    April 15

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    you have such lovely rhythm in your words and you paint such beautiful visions. i think the quintella was especially tickly to me as i read it with luscious lines dripping with intrigue and miracles just lovely

  • ecrivain01
    April 10
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    Very nice Sandi ...

    I particularly liked the second one.

    J.D.