Mmmmm...
the things you say to me
when you're so close,
nearly at my lips,
melt right through me,
smooth
and delicious
Oh, and when you finally touch me
keeping true
to every promised anticipation,
overwhelming sweetness soothes me
inside and out
You comfort me if I'm anxious
and tempt me with scintillating games
when I'm bored--
always sure to satiate
in the end.
I can't deny any of that.
But you have to understand--
sometimes too much of a good thing
can arouse an uneasy feeling in me
--even regret--
And though I would never want my words to deny you
nor the weighty truth to push you away,
I respect you enough to be honest. . .
I have another love--
and for me,
you will always take second place
... to chocolate.
Author notes
80's Music Prompt Title: Anyway You Like It--Journey
In a list
A contest entry
- Refreshed Retro by Dalaney.
1000 points, ended March 21, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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ahhah, wow, i love it!!!
this is truth
peace to all ~flight
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Wonderful piece of writing, just love the way you use your creative expression.
Love the images, splendidly done indeed.
Be blessed in all you do.
Tony
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You are a girl after my own heart. It's a good thing that chocolate is legal for I might be forced to the dark side to secure it on the black market if necessary. I am not a big dessert eater, but I am unable to resist the call of a warm brownie (particularly with walnuts and chocolate chips).
I loved how this poem leads us in one direction and then inserts a sweet twist at the end. Clever and sensual...a hallmark of your poetry. Liz
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Surprise ending
I too love chocolate. Not more than my honey though. Very good.
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Wll written with a surprise at that end. A very entertaining write and a pleasure to read. I will now enjoy my HERSHEY BAR.
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wow this is good you did such a good job and i cant wait to reaad the next one my favorit part was
But you have to understand--
sometimes too much of a good thing
can arouse an uneasy feeling in me
--even regret--
because i can relate -
A dove is smooth and chocalately, Boy your not the only one. I am addicted, I am try to stop. Yikes my clothes don't fit. To much of a good thing.
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10,000 soothing cicadas
Too much of a good thing? Your whole site is delicious. I have heard the sound of 10,000 cicadas annd more, and I find them very relaxing like your style. Best Wishes!
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Fantastic entry. Great ending following the weaving path of thoughts and imagery.
Don
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ahhh.. yes, a smile indeed, puts a new meaning to the hershey thing...no wonder they call it a chocolate kiss...very funny...PK
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Hershey's kisses, green M 'n M's .... it's all good!!!!!
Thanks for reading... and smiling!
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LOL, love this...yes Chocolate so powerful indeed.
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The last line was so unexpected! My goodness! The whole "chocolate" thing is too funny! Great idea!
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Thanks for enjoying, Z. Glad to see you!
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Dark & Sweet
...and all I have to worry about is occasional acne.
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Ha!
A small price to pay for true love!
Thanks for stopping by donnz
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lovely
Now, there's one of those closing lines that ensures a second read.
Luvit!
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Thanks so much, Tom! I was hoping the last line would have that exact effect and that folks would take time to read again. That first part should come across quite a bit differently in a second read.
Hopefully yummier!
Thanks for leaving your thoughts.
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sigh...the contest asked for ten lines and this is one of the best entries.
love, lane
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Ah, thanks... sorry about not noticing the line limit... it was in the wee hours last night. Thats my excuse, I guess!
I think I'll go have some chocolate.
Fun contest idea. Thanks.
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Such a tasteful competition,
to scented kissing intuition
when distant smokes in fiery strokes
of ice-cream wishes,
the topping dripping pools
perspiring sppon to dip in drooling lava,
sipping on a cup of Java.
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WEll done Ten, Yea, you got me too, damn chocolate, always chocolate -chocolate, chocolate.
chocolate...
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You are evil! You tricked me...when I got to much of a good thing I thought, "Is she insane? most women would kill for that!" Then the second place bit and I was ready to defend the first guy, you'd have been reading a scathing denunciation right now, lol But, what can I say...every woman I have ever loved know she was only second best in my heart to my true love, Moxie, lol So I can identify with your poem.
Now I'll have that darned song by Journey floating around in my head all day, lol
Now you have to write a poem about your true love.
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MMMM...
Yeah, l.o.l.
*smiling widely* you got me..AGAIN! l.o.l. gosh i'm such a sucker your setup is so perfect it's disgusting! although chocolate is understandablely quite high on many a list! l.o.l. EXCELLENT pen my friend!
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Oh my you are so clever This is just wonderful Love it!
best wishes in the contest.
Gaylene
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