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time and tide

I stand
barefoot
in the sand
as time and tide
rush by
nipping at my ankles
pulling me
beyond the horizon

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  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    March 22

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    Lovely. Simple yet full of thought and image. Longfellow would see this - I am sure he would.

    Sometimes, as in this case, less is truly more. very well done. Thank you. Best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela