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Black Halo.

Even when the skies are blue

that dark cloud still follows me

like a black halo

stealthly waiting for a smile

until he attacks...

 

Down comes that spinning funnel

to whip me off my feet

into a vortex of woe.

 

He spews out his aftermath

of death and destruction

leaving every flower void

of petals.

 

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  • BearWoman gold member
    March 26

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    This feels pretty bleak: "leaving every flower void / of petals." Effective imagery (using "void" rather than "stripped" gives a different connotation).

    A few possible spelling changes (American English)?:

    to whip me ofF my feet

    of death and dEstruction

    Thanks for being a part of geckogirl's AP family.


    • Lady Ireland gold member
      March 26

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      Thank you for pointing ut the English?American spelllings.
      I have amended those now so thanks again.
      dolores x


  • Denerica
    March 21

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    We all felt like this for a time or two, imagery and flow was wonderful. Clever thoughts. Blessings.


  • geckogirl silver member
    March 21
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    thanks for the entry


  • Phallen
    March 20
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    nice one.


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    March 20

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    Magnificent Metaphor...

    Wish I had written this one!! Good luck in the contest, Lady Dolores!!


  • Pure Thought silver member
    March 20

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    Wonderfully expressed for your sentiments.
    The beautiful thing about flowers, they will bloom again, as I know you will.

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