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Warning: Proceed With Caution

She came with a warning you totally chose to ignore,

so here you are all forlorn as your tears mop the floor.

You were told if you must pursue, please do so with caution,

since the end result would mean emotional exhaustion.

 

 

You went in blazing with your heart laid out on a golden platter.

We asked you to be prudent but nothing said  seemed to matter.

While you truly thought that she was yours just for the asking,

you were only the worm on a hook and she did the casting.

 

 

Remember when you laid eyes on her you saw your destinity.

You seriously believed she would be yours from then to infinity.

Warnings signs was written all over her soul, spirit, and her face.

She was designed for the hunt and you were ready for the chase.

 

 

To you no precaution was needed, so you didn't take heed.

Through the intensity of your pain, now with caution you proceed.

She came with a warning, one that you chose to repeatedly ignore.

If had read her label you would have known what she had in store!!

 

 

Marjorie Joyce Leslie

03/20/09

 

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  • penman gold member
    May 23
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    Wonderful

    Very well done. So very creative. Congrats on the honorable mention

  • First, let me state that I love how the title spills into the first line of the poem. I haven't seen that written for a while on this site. Clever!

    Sometimes, no matter how much we warn, we must recognize that it is their choice to heed, to listen... It breaks my heart when I tell someone what is ahead and they choose to take that path anyway.


    I've been dealing with a 26 year old niece that has chosen to cross the line and smoke drugs (crack). I tried to tell her that I had done it for her already and she didn't have to. I tried to tell her what a hazard it is on the body and she has other health issues to boot. She's been away from the family for almost a month now. Her son has MS and really can't fathom why his mommy won't at least call. He's ten. Sometimes I want to hug her, on other occasions, I want to choke her but I know she has to experience this unnecessary trip on her own, just as I did. She is gorgeous. My hope (laced with vanity) is that she doesn't come out looking twice her age and that it does not affect her diabetes. ~sigh

    Sorry for spilling on your page but this poem brought my dilemma to the forefront.

    Your rhyming poetry is chalked with life’s reality! I wish you the best in this contest dear sister.



    Always Loving YOU ♥

    Renee


  • Elenaliz
    April 15
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    wow this is really awesome havent read one like or about this before i read slowly and rally enjoyed it. all of it from beginning to end.the way you wrote it makes me wonder who you wrote it about and of you wrote especially for the contest it should have won.good write.


  • gaiascully
    April 14
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    I love it! I often read people better then most, so this type of situation has come up many times. I have sadly predicted break ups up to 5 months before the fact, just by paying attention to peoples intentions. A little time can save a lot of hurt. Love the way you wrote this, very honest and blunt, like a true friend or big sister looking out for best interests.


  • TabbyCat
    April 13

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    I love your style...I just read a few of your works, and I was entertained by the unique blend of clever wit and underlying wisdom.
    All too often I have been the one who chose to overlook the blatantly obvious "warning label."


  • LdyBrknWing gold member
    April 6
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    AMEN!

    Man...how many times have we given this advice??? (And sometimes, been on the receiving end of it.) I've heard it said that "...the only thing people learn from others' experience is that we never learn from others' experience." Can I get an "Amen" to THAT one??? lol Wonderful piece, here, girl! From the way this read, I'd say you've given this speech a time or two. Great job!

    Paula


  • Ken-Maverick
    March 22

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    JUDGED!!!

    D.Q this? After all the effort you put in it,
    nah, i'm no prick.
    I really enjoyed this write. Well done!!
    All the best to you in the contest

    Ken

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