The world has been fabricated
Constructed and made up
The truth has been masticated
And spit out as lies
Effectively controlling our lives
Open
Your
Goddamn
Eyes
They're the gods that you serve
The truth is what you deserve
Open your eyes and observe
Your freedom your life
Slowly being embezzled
Stripped away and then sold back
With interest
By them,they,those,the ones
Who hide behind cover
While standing in plain sight
Their very existence disguised
A masonic entity hidden in lies
We're mere slaves in their eyes
They buy and sell human lives
Like a stockmarket
To them your only a percent sign
They control the world and all who reside
Constitutions revised
Your rights declined
The religion you take faith
They made it up
The laws you abide
They wrote them up
The money you work for
They print it up
The presidents and leaders you vote for
And have faith in
They put them on the podiums
And in the steeples
They are the shepherds herding
We the people
Its time to wake up
Realize and start learning
We're not free,never were
And never can be
Unless we put aside our differences
And join together as one
Before the world has you know
Is dissolved
We need to remember mankind's resolve
And our strength for survival
Its time for our free spirits revival
Stop living our lives
Like rats in a maze
Walking around confused
In a daze
Wake up
Stand up
For you
Your brothers
Your sisters
Put aside
Your Greed
Hate
And envy
Open up
Your selflessness
Compassion
And pity
LOVE ONE LOVE ALL
STAND UP
STAND
TALL...
Author notes
Shawnecy808
A contest entry
- The Stupidity Has To Stop! by UnknownFemale.
700 points, ended April 5, 42 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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pretty good, i really liked this one, not the best i got but i really did like it. thanks for entering and keep writting
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Great write, and straight to the giblets of this asylum we all live in. Congrats on the best show.
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nice anti political poem i agree with you very brave and emotional you schould Nietchze you would love it also check out my poem liberty or Death? I hope you like it congrats on gold btw
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Wow Wow there should be one above gold for this wonderful truthful in your face write ..a great protest poem well crafted and written ..this world needs a real shake up and poetry like this will truth out
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Can't express. you went as it needed in every line, with every word.
we have to learn
there is alot to take care and pray
you are right with your thoughts
wish you luck
and happy Gold!
keep up the good work
by
the poet of hearts and beautiful words
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Great piece here. There are a lot of truths hidden in here, and the force of this poem is one to be contended with. Excellent write and good luck in my contest.
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I really iked this piece, the overall message was great and the flow was nice for the most part.
I love it when people are not afraid to play with form, so I loved the beginning, but then that second part kind of lost me. I liked what you wrote, I just think the form of that second stanza seemed jumbled and claustrophobic, in a way.
I would work on punctuation and rethink some phrases that are a bit cliche...they could probably be cut out and the whole piece would be more effective.
Great idea and a nice, powerful stance...
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I'm in awe.
This is one of the better pieces that I have read. You have such a talent and what you want to put across in your writing. I hope to read move of your moving poems. -
Wow, this is cool. In my head I hear a drum beat pulsing under the lyrics—this is a poem that ought to be read out loud! I like the rhyming and the rhythm changes, and the last stanza is very powerful and ties the whole piece together.
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a very powerful write
They're the gods that you serve
The truth is what you deserve
Open your eyes and observe
and this verse gave such an impact
in the whole piece and I love the rhyming of it
as well
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This gets out a very great message, however, in poetic form, this gets very boring. Your repetive-ness in this peice didn't keep me very interested. Your emotions in the piece stayed the same throughout, even at the end. The rhyme you had, some of it seemed forced, others it flowed greatly with the peice. Because of some of the forced rhyme the flow went haywire in some places. This is just my opinion though. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
Josh
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GOOD
Indeed, emotional...
I like the last 4 lines:
LOVE ONE LOVE ALL
STAND UP
STAND
TALL... -
The illusion of choice sustains this fragile reality.
'stripped away and then sold back with interest'.
Nice write. -
Great message; very hopeful and positive. I would change, "Stand up/For you and your brothers" to "brothers and sisters" since we want to put aside our differences "And join together as one' But other than that I wouldn't change a thing.
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Very strong piece, I love the emotion here, escpecially in the last line. Very straightforward. Bravo!!!
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Wow, this is exactly what I'm looking for.
Every bit of this poem is true. Totally awesome piece!
Thanks for your entry and good luck!
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