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Then Comes A Day

Ive thrown the razor-blades away
Sewn my wrists shut tight
I feel I wish to live today
all for love

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im in love

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  • shoret
    March 20

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    Happy

    I am happy that you found love. I like the third line where you say "I feel I wish to live today." I like that you added the I feel in front of it. It changes the meaning of the sentence in a way that adds an extra punch of emotion.

  • heva
    March 20

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    its amazin how quickly love can change how you feel just take it easy cos it can break everything as soon as its fixed it xx