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Lonely good-nights

A soundless performance
being created by
dancing illuminations
of the greatest heights.

Our visions in motion
forming a
blue butterfly effect,
floating below
islands of stars
struck in diamond like unison.

A beautiful ballet
performed
by our bodies
in motion.

Dangling digits
corrupting fireflies
in the night,
longing desires summoned
to swirl in the mind
of our lonely
good-nights.

While we sing

all alone
natures song.

Author notes

Painting # 9: "Night Music
CREDIT ARTIST: Jeffrey K. Bedrick

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  • SpeakLove93
    April 10

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    Beautiful

    I love this piece! The imagery is truly amazing and it flows so nicely. I love how you say "Our visions in motion
    forming a
    blue butterfly effect". Such a lovely job! Thank you for entering!


  • Cyanide Dreams
    April 10

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    Great write ! I really enjoyed the imagery in this piece and I liked the deep thoughts with this. I think you did great with the prompt. It flowed smoothly as well. Great job and good luck in the contest.

    Josh


  • perfectsunset gold member
    March 24

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    Deeply beautiful thoughts & portrayals.
    This was a treasure to read
    and everything pieced together
    so wonderfully.

    Thanks for entering & best of luck


  • Rovingone gold member
    March 24

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    Fantastic grand images unveiled throughout this poem. You put a totally unique perspective on the illustration.


  • okadadokie
    March 21
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    Beautiful dear brother. No other way to put it, simply wonderful.


  • going nowhere
    March 20

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    this made me blush for some reason as i read this.. the beauty of the night sky that seems so vast, yet can hold us to close to watch its every move. the imagery in this is wonderful.


  • elemental angel
    March 20
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    Beautiful
    Bravo

  • sleepinglion
    March 20
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    Lovely verse, nice take on the picture


  • Angierie
    March 20
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    Insane imagery! I love it!

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