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blend

I wonder if these indigo
scratches will curve over me,
cover me and blend with me

maybe if I sit,
still as the painted horses
in a carousel
the golds and the greens
might melt enough
to absorb me

if I let him fuck me slowly
as if we were making love,
I wonder if my milky lines
would join his musky stubble
and settle a second
closer than my furthest sight

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  • retribusive
    March 20

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    I really like the imagery here. Of my own interpretation, it seems as if the person is trying to blend in to the surroundings, in order to hide from someone close in her life who's raping her.

    This is a very powerful write. Great flow and choice of words. Good job.


  • alpPDCjr12
    March 20

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    I think these other comments might be missing the point.

    "Indigo scratches"

    "As if we were making love" (key words being "as if")

    "Settle a second closer than my furthest sight"

    If I am correct in interpretting this, all of these lines indicate that the poem is about rape.


  • motel silver member
    March 20

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    this is an excellent take on the title prompt ... very creative and wonderful images. I like the surprising shift in the last stanza to a grittier feel, very flesh and bones, from the first two dreamlike stanzas.
    thanks and good luck in the contest.


  • righteousme
    March 20

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    oh my my ... this is intense ... and the image of things melting into you is great ... good luck in the contest ...