You left me physically and mentally alone in a prison of pain. I never had any visitors, I was in solitary confinement, only occasional conjugal visits. My stripes worn inside, always carrying around this stigma. You were like the warden, tortuous with your coldness feeding me all your slop, beating me with your baton. I have the keys to my cell, a living hell. I am my own parole board, judging if I'm ready to be free, free from your agony. Starting anew in society is terribly scary, my crime of passion follows me like a shadow. My scarlet letter is my heart, only I know it's there. I have done my time, rapped of innocence, I am forever hardened. Embracing my new found self, I proclaim, gush grim grief. Dry tears constantly falling from my eye, I am transformed into a speck of dust. Hoping to be sucked into the vacuum of feeling, no knowing if I will ever be used, for my warranty has expired.
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"Help Me Feel Again"
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Comments
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Wow this is fricken amazing I love the title and the write wow.. strong emotions in this Awesome write
Thank you so much for entering my contest and Good luck
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ohhh i like the last part about your warranty being expired! thank you for entering.
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You have some powerful emotion twisted in with some utterly beautiful lines
The Positives:
such a great poem all around it really showed just how much another can affect you so deeply
Room For Improvement:
Nothing I can see you did wonderful
My Favorite Part:
Starting anew in society is terribly scary, my crime of passion follows me like a shadow. My scarlet letter is my heart, only I know it's there. I have done my time, rapped of innocence, I am forever hardened.
that is just so great you did amazing on this
Overall:
I give this an 9/10 you did great. I hope to see you in my future contests thanks so much for entering.
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Raw honesty at it's utmost.
I feel this write you have penned.
The feelings you feel are your own
but shared with others.
Thanks for the share.
Darky
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The desire for indefirence in this world where we loom so large in our own inner being, this is what this write does speak to me of.
I like it, I like it so!
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I like the idea of your warranty expiring. That really added to this prosy piece. Excellent write and good luck in my contest.
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Amazing
Well done, it had a nice flow to it, and it kept me reading until the end!I love the imagery to this really it was nicely written.
Thank you for entering.
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Wow
amazing
So raw
So honest
Nice way to let it all out
I say well done.
Keep the ink flowing
Good luck to you in the contests
Fire
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great job! I liked the flow and continuity of the poem. that is exactly what I asked for. there was no holding back which once again is what i asked for. It is very dark and horrific. good job and good luck in the contest.
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