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Wine red

      

 

 

 

Wine red dress she had on,

music playing soft and low,

watching through window panes

as rain fell like glass on ice

cold wind blowing

from the past.

 

Holding her like you held me

mesmerized 

consumed with pain.

bottle crashed against willow,

wrists 

Wine red stains

my innocence, my dress.

 

 

Now I lay me down to sleep

I pray the Lord my soul...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Coloring in my world.

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  • Melissa Burns
    November 13

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    I enjoyed reading this; beautiful and dark... "Holding her like you held me," That lined pulled me in and placed me in this poem. I've missed reading your poems, they are always very expressive and real, this is just another great example of that!


  • Dragonheart1 gold member
    November 3

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    Thus a a nice romantic poem.. We all loose our innocence in different ways...so why not make it romantic?

    return the favor?


  • Camille Morin gold member
    October 21

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    You lead us beautifully into a great moment of shock. You grabbed me here and pulled me right into the pain. Amazing work.

    Love,
    CM


  • Dulcyflower
    October 8

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    Intense but very good

    Written I feel with pain past, but like your mix of words. it raises feelings when you read it. Very well done.
    Doreen

  • Michael P
    September 27

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    I want to say -who hurt you so-but it does not matter so much any more, I think some memories are such, as to be occasionally touched-considered for self-protective qualities and then left alone-this poem strikes me as sadly reflective-"Now I lay me down to sleep" and done with-beautifully written my friend-peace


  • Obani
    September 26
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    Oh, that ending was so sad, there is so much emotion in this! I am amazed


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    March 28
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    A romantic/dark piece; I like this.

    Well written.

    mj.


  • parenchma
    March 28

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    This is a very powerful write; it touches heavily on the complications of trying to bond. I think it speaks to the need for monogamy and trust...
    I wonder as we discard as irrelevant all our customs for a everyone do as you think best total lack of concensus what the consequences will be. We all create the world we live in. Then we have to decide individually if we can stand to live in it...


  • Brazos silver member
    March 27

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    Mmmmmmmmm, seems a bit dark for you, but you always make me feel so livlely I have trouble seeing the dark, lol.

    Your symbolism here has me reeling a bit, I wonder about the significance of the red. Is it the blood of loss, the blood of death, or perhaps the blood of the loss of innocence, as suggested by your lines "Wine red stains my innocence, my dress"?

    Whatever, come to me, and I will help you.

    Love,
    Brazos


    • Rheea gold member
      March 27
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      Just going back in time dear Brazos when your mind wanders on a cold rainy day, remembering things better left alone.


  • Cup-a-Joe
    March 26

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    Very nice

    I can feel pain in this write. To provoke emotion in the reader is the higest praise.
    Joe


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    March 25

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    Love this...

    Great use of imagery, metaphor & poetic device makes for a compelling & abstract read that delights the senses on so many levels...
    Another fantastic piece...
    Keep up the good work...
    Well done!!!


  • Amandainlove
    March 20
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    Hmmm. I like this.
    Good luck.


  • Maxboy gold member
    March 20
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    A very nice write, but oh so sad.

    Well Done

  • celadia
    March 20
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    I like the flow of this piece, the emotion, too.

  • Michael P
    March 19
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    awesome write Rheea, a great story, so much said, I've read and reread this each time it seems to read a different way but comes to the same conclusion excellent...peace

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