small black stones drop
through clear blue silence
and splash ever so lightly
in still water thoughts
ripples expand concentric
rebounding from the edge of mind
sliding back beneath eccentric
rings that wimple shards of light
and fade
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and fade.
I love that ending. Perfectly crafted as a whole piece too. I like the fact that you don't use puncuation. Is that just by chance, or are you making it a point to exclude it from your work? Just curious
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Each poem I write is its own creature. As it comes into being, the poem tells me if it wants punctuation or not, and if so, which style (there are different ways to punctuate a poem).
Glad you enjoyed this. Yes this is a special poem to me. I'm glad I wrote it, and it was nice bring brought back to it again by your comment.
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stunning.
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This is an amazing piece! wow!
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Thanks!
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Excellent
Hello Zahar...its a beauty indeed.
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Thank you sir.
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My interpretation:
A negative thought that enters your mind and probably tries to permeate through your conscience. Or may be just the thought of somebody in your past flashes across your mind and momentarily gives you a false hope during a solitary hour.
The thought (whichever it may be) causes a momentary impact (ripple) and passes by just as quickly returning you your calmness...
I think i can personally relate to that feeling, the latter one I suggested that is. The last stanza, for some inane reason reminds me of a few lines I'd written a long time back which went something like
" i am to you but
passing zephyr to the old oak
that stirs up the leaves
and after the momentary rustle
loses itself within
the echoes of silence"
Anyway this is a rather good piece. One of your more contemplative ones I guess!
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Great analysis. Very well suited to the poem and its imagery.
Have you by any chance ever heard a raven sing? The high pitched song that sounds a lot like pebbles being dropped one by one into a clear canyon pond? It's one of the most unusual sounds I've ever heard from a bird--and pleasing.
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Amazing job.
Beautiful poem. I loved reading it over and over again. Nicely done. It was wonderful to read. It was lovely, and really liked the last line.
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Glad you seemed to enjoy. Not sure what you enjoyed, though. Your compliments tend to be very similar to one another, not really addressing anything specific or giving me the impression you actually read the poem.
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