The clock was chiming in that witching hour,
outside the clouds were all dark and grey;
when a knock came at the front door.
I was the only one home, not sure what to do.
My feet, they somehow made it to the door.
Hand slowly moves up to unlock the locks.
Palms are sweaty, when, the knock comes again,
louder than before and the wind starts to howl.
I freeze where I was, because I dared to look
out the peekhole, no one there.
The porch is empty!
The knock comes louder, I jump back!
My hand turns the knob on its own.
A hooded figure stands there in a black robe,
his long skinny fingers point down to the road
where my car is parked. I did not question,
I dared not ask what it wanted of me.
I just ran out of my home, with my car keys
got my car started and went down the road.
I race down the highway with all the inside
lights on. As I looked to one side of my car,
there was a hearst, it was now twelve o' nine.
Heading to the all night donut shop,
seeing their lights lets me breath slightly.
Parking the car, I step out and look at the roof.
There I can see long finger marks on it.
They end in a sharp point, like the point of a dagger.
For two hours I just sit there, slowly telling myself
that everything will be fine.
As I head home, I keep telling myself that
it was not real, it was just a nightmare.
I keep this up until I open my front door.
That is when, I see cracks going all
up and down my walls. Something strange
had happen here, and I was not to know what.
But, in the morning light....
off in the corner of my basement
curled up under a blanket..
the figure move with a wicked smile...
a howling could be heard .. coming from my home
each night till the dark moon.
Author notes
Now.. I know I did not go on to say ..
what was happening..
but .. left it as a mystery
so each reader can fill in their own
thoughts as to what had just happen.
Hope you all like it.
A contest entry
- The Darkwrite Challenge (Season 6) by Ktulu Blackwolfe.
400 points, ended March 27, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Well done!
My friend,
I am glad that you are moving on to the next round. A storyteller such as you cannot be denied.
Looking forward to dueling with you.
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Excellent air you have created here. I do like the tale you have told. As Ktulu said tho some parts just don't read right, I do think you need to look it over a little. But well told. Thanks for entering and good luck
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Oooooh, this was really scary. I DON'T want to think about that creature in the basement!!! It is almost midnight here and I want to sleep tonight! Geez, can you raise the goosebumps! (Did I say, well-done, yet???) Good luck in the contest. Now I'm going to turn on all the lights in my bedroom.
Lita
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Thanks! now I will never look at a basement darkness in the same way again!!!! Geeesh! I am creeped out now... deliciously dark and welcome to the challenge... I don't see how the judges could deny you entry.... lololol
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For two hours I just sit there, slowly telling myself
that everything will be find.
I believe the end word here should be fine.
If I may, I think you may want to re-read this with an editors eye.
With that said, I do like this story. I think that some things could have been left out while there is some that are missing that could make it a tad bit creepier but that is just my own opinion. I loved how you left this to the imagination of the reader....BRAVO!
**Ktulu Blackwolfe**
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