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Trekking Through Misery

How far must one travel in order to reach the end? From the pain this life inflicts. So your wounds can finally mend.

There is no place to rest. And no one to befriend. You’re somehow not surprised.

For this was a lifelong trend. You’re looking to climb your way out of the hole. Always while trying to defend.

But it never truly happens for you. And deeper in the void you descend. At the bottom while bleeding you feel like Sisyphus rolling the bolder uphill.

Just to watch as it falls again and again. But when you reach the summit. You may feel it was worth it to obtain Zen.

Because sometimes you have to go through hell. In order to reach heaven.

A contest entry

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  • Leance
    July 12

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    I would like to thank you for taking the time to view and enter my contest.
    Contests here on Allpoetry are a lot of fun and I hope that everyone enjoys them.
    I will soon be posting a contest for BRONZE only poems. I do hope you will consider entering.

    If you are dreaming, you should be writing
    For dreams are words we should share
    Sharing makes us all stronger
    So thank you for sharing your dreams and words with me

    Judging:
    I do agree that sometimes we must travel through hell to reach heaven. I think this would be great if you added to it.

    Title: I actually like this title, very fitting.
    Content: A bit light on the content yet the poem was very direct.
    Imagery: Imagery could be somewhat more yet this was not an imagery poem.
    Grammar: Grammar appears good.
    Flow : Flow was good and consitent.
    A goal is a dream with a deadline.
    -Napolean Hill-


    • Dark passenger
      July 12
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      Thank you for the comment. I appreciate the input. I will be sure to look up your bronze contest. May be you can send me a link to it when it opens.

      Allawy


  • DramaQueen469 gold member
    May 30

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    A beautiful piece, very well-written.
    Thankyou so much for entering, and I wish you the best of luck!!

    Maria


  • Three Doves
    April 25
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    Congratulations on the award! All So True! Even in our living Hell, Heaven does exist. Peace on Earth, Good Will toward Men! A way of life, not a cliche. Hopefully one day it will be reached, slowly our ways of thinking are changing for the better of all.
    In God's Love
    Three Doves

  • Backporchphilosopher gold member
    April 24
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    Nice write

    Thanks for submitting...hopefully at the end of suffering is a paradise.


  • firevixen7
    March 19

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    I liked how you say 'rolling a bolder uphill' because I can imagine thats impossible or very difficult to do. Your poems are very colorful and paint a naked canvas of rainbow colors.

    • Dark passenger
      March 20
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      “I liked how you say 'rolling a bolder uphill' because I can imagine thats impossible or very difficult to do.”

      If you can imagine that, then imagine reaching the top just to see it fall once more. What a cruel and horrible punishment.

      "Your poems are very colorful and paint a naked canvas of rainbow colors"

      I love the Analogy in this comment. You really are an artist.

      Allawy

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