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Poet

I'm a simple minded simple man
Who'll live as long as his life span
And when I die then I'll be dead
There'll be no more poems in my head
So all I ask is till that day
Just let me say what I must say
And when I come to my last stand
Let me die peaceful pen in hand

 

chael 09

 

 

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  • guardianhost gold member
    March 29
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    Very well said

    May you live a very long and healthy life.
    I enjoy your style.


  • I-Like-Rhymes gold member
    March 20
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    I like the deceptive simplicity of this little piece. I especially like the double meanings in your last line.
    "Let me die peaceful pen in hand"
    Is that "peaceful me " or a "peaceful pen"? I suppose we can all decide where we would place the comma!
    Good write and good luck
    Jim


  • waydownuponjoy
    March 20

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    I liked the simplistic ...

    honesty that comes with this poem and it's a pleasure to meet a fellow poet who is over 50 ...
    Nice poem that is easy to read! jy


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    March 20

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    So well put! let one pen till the end and then bury that pen with the poet, thank you for this entry, like it! MM


  • NurseChilly gold member
    March 20

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    shouldn't it be.. let 'me' die peaceful??
    anyways.... endline rhyming, not usually my thing... but hey ho..
    you managed to pull this off
    well done
    G.x


    • chael
      March 20
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      Absolutley

      Me it should be, thankyou. And I'm glad you like this it was written in about 4 minutes give or take. It's just one of those that are there. I don't know how but they are.....chael


  • rufina caraid gold member
    March 20
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    http://oldpoetry.com/opoem/128060-Emily-Mary-Barton--Pen----60th-Birthday
    This is a link to a poem on Oldpoetry - about a Pen, given the ending to your poem it may be of interest to you too. Enjoy, Von


  • Cat
    March 20
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  • Legend silver member
    March 20

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    My friend what make you think that death will stop the poetry Once bitten there is no end Great piece A most enjoyable read
    Good luck in the contest


    • chael
      March 20
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      Ya I know

      Poems have a life of thier own, Thanks for pointing that out. Sometimes I forget to see the up.....chael

  • rufina caraid gold member
    March 20
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    It may be over the word limit but I like it very much.To pass peacefully with your pen in your hand is a lovely, calm thought -I hope when it happens you have reached your final 'fullstop' so not to leave anyone guessing - or maybe that might be ok too.
    Glad I came here, Von


    • chael
      March 20
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      Thak you

      Every now and then I get lucky and a poem like this comes out of my pen.....chael

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